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    Heavenly Sword

    I'm kind of new here, I made a new account because the old one was inactive from a while back & was giving me to many problems, and I want to be more active here on this board. So anyway, here's my first piece, Nariko from Heavenly Sword! This started out with my sketch and then painted all on photoshop. Hope you guys like it!

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    I like the girl, the lines are great and the anatomy is dead on. I think a little more sharpness in the background would help though, it seems a little too fuzzy.

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    The anatomy is dead on? How is her butt showing from this angle? She must have a HUGE butt. Isn't that something you get when you look up at a girl from their front? And what's with her left wrist? The whole arm feels displaced somehow. Also, the foreshortening on her left leg is not believable to me.

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    Thanks Madfishmonger, I appreciate the comment.

    Wow nothing nice to say at all Blue Disciple, just an attack? That's pretty harsh for a first comment from you.

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    I think that this Looks great!
    it needs some work though.
    her left foot it kind of awkward. it looks as if it is twisted at a strange angle and the Background needs some work.
    but besides that
    awesome!

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    Dont mind Blue Disciple. I will help you as nice as possible. I would suggest that you dig in the anatomy studies a little more. I like the pose. The coloring isn't that strong. Expand your range other than yellow to red. The red pop out to much, from distance where it should be just a blur. Her hair is moving in the oppisite direction from where the wind is blowing. The background is a bit scratchy. And since the sun seems to be setting in the background. The should be a lot more darker tones in the picture. Good luck!! Also take in mind I havn't played the game!

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    I agree with the crits mentioned except for the wind. The loin cloth direction can easily fix this.

    Not all crits will be gracefully delivered. *shrug* I don't think there is a critique tact quota to remain a member each month (is there?). Take heed to the crits negative or positive and use what is most valuable to your growth and the rest is taken or left.

    Oh and any normal lurker/frequenter around here is well aware by now the quality of Blue's comments around these threads. While I don't think this one was that bad, some additional help could've turned that around.

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    This is a good start, but I think some very important elements are off a little. The background is well done but I think it's a little too saturated, it competes with the elements in the foreground. In the foreground pick your elements of importance. In the figure find an area to bring out more than the rest, either in clarity, or with values, or with color. If it's going to be the face and hair find a way to make it stand out just a little more, play with the lighting and experiment. If it's going to be the entire figure, find a way to bring her out more from the background. You want your background to compliment and support the figure, but not compete with her now like it's doing.

    Speaking of anatomy it's not bad, but there are some things that are off. The arm going into the distance is too long if it's going backwards. It needs to be forshortened a little more. The hand coming out needs some work, it needs a better grip and gesture. A little more definition. Speaking of the character I know that she's an agile and capable figure, but think about her sex appeal as well. She's a fighter, but she's also a beauty. Her looks need to be convincing as both, and right now I'm seeing her as more barbaric because of the played up anatomy. The belly button is too low, it should be up higher where the waist pinches. The bumps and lines in the pelvic area are also a little too harsh. I think those could be taken out or at least played down. Think about her character...sex sells, she has this appeal that needs to be kept intact I think. The face has got it for the most part, but the body is lacking that sexy sleek curvy thang that women play off so well.

    This is nice though, love the direction, but I think you can push it more. Cheers! =)

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    Quote Originally Posted by Blue Disciple View Post
    The anatomy is dead on? How is her butt showing from this angle? She must have a HUGE butt. Isn't that something you get when you look up at a girl from their front? And what's with her left wrist? The whole arm feels displaced somehow. Also, the foreshortening on her left leg is not believable to me.
    Whine all you want about this comment, he's still right.

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    Well, theirs ways you could say it without being rude. Like everybody elses post. Nor his comment was helpful. It just put off the artist! Plus recently his comments have been rude but he already apologized in his thread in the art discussion forum.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Blue Disciple View Post
    The anatomy is dead on? How is her butt showing from this angle? She must have a HUGE butt. Isn't that something you get when you look up at a girl from their front? And what's with her left wrist? The whole arm feels displaced somehow. Also, the foreshortening on her left leg is not believable to me.
    What a jerk. No one needs negative input like this idiot offers.
    Well done VinnieArt, very impressive. Please only take from the positive critism offered.

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    For some reason, I'm struck by her cooch, it looks terrifying.

    I hate how I can't think of anything more productive to say than that.

    The anatomy seems a little strange to me. I'm not sure. She's just so damn muscular! Like skinny wee arms and hench legs?

    I would like to see more work from you though, it's a great scene.. try and clear up the background a bit though? The beauty is in the details!

    Oh and, the flags. I'm sorry they just don't work. The flag on the top of the building especially, just left of her head. I'm sorry, they really look out of place.

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    Thanks Guys, I know a lot of you are being very helpful. I appreciate it, I can see and take in the constructive criticism, but I know 1 or 2 people love to be negative all around cause they think its "fun" shooting down everyone's art lol, but No hard feelings, happens on forums everyday. This was just a fun piece for me, getting close to how the game is in mood & feel, it wasn't for anything work related so I'm cool with what you all have said. (but I am keeping her hair as it is lol, play the game, you'll understand better.) If I can make more time to get back this piece I'll make some corrections to the key issues a lot of you have expressed "look off" I'll post more soon, Merry Christmas everyone!

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