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I'm applying for Sheridan's Illustration program (2008-2009 school year) and I was looking for some critiques as I go through the process of personal studies / working on 'submit-able' pieces.
I will just be posting my personal sketchbook work / studies as well as portfolio pieces as I complete them.
This thread was previously posted in the Critique centre but I think it is more appropriate to be here.
All critiques / comments are welcome!
Some Bridgman hand studies, from reference . . .
Some 'just for fun' sketches . . .
Hey n. I just wrote a long winded message to you about your stuff here. I hope it helps.
why should we ignore bad aspects of a drawing? thats the part you learn from right? and thats what ur here for
im not in the mood for critics at the moment, just wanted to say, good luck with getting into art college, im pursuing the same goal, good luck, ill be checking you soon and maybe even give you some advice u can actually use
btw, i love the last one, nice cartoony feel!
My sketchbook: http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...106521&page=11
ajvenema: Thanks for the compliment. I will go lurk your sketchbook and see if I can offer any advice, there? Good luck with your portfolio/application processes as well.
I would love if, like you said, you would check back and offer advice later. Hopefully i will have some new pieces to crit. soon!
Nicely done on the hands. The construction of them is great. Also think about possibly incorporating your hands with holding an object as well. Think about (hang onto your britches now) possibly combining both this assignment and the corkscrew to form one illustration.
Much MUCH more complex piece but bigger bang for the buck too.
You've really got a solid knack for mechanical drawings which will be key to developing other illustration skills. A lot of people forget how important mechanical/ technical drawing can be.
My one strong suggestion with this one is define how you want us to look at the brickwork on this building. The darkness of the bricks on the right side of the building are obviously darker to give us a sense of shadow- which is great. But then look at some of the details on the front of the church- I'd simplify that brickwork or darken the shadow brickwork just to give it a slight sense of contrast. Also think about how you want the roof to look as well- it's pretty uniform in tone; you might want to consider adding some sort of texture/ tone there as well.
Also the small brick wall closest to us- you could probably simplify the amount of detail there the way you simplified the leaves on the trees. Do we, as the viewer really need to see every bit of mortar and crevice detail on that wall? Probably not because it detracts a bit from the important stuff- the church.
It's a very subtle concept of choosing what is really important in an illustration. You are the illustrator and you control the viewers' eye. What is the most important thing you want us to see. More detail is not exactly the best thing for an illustration unless it's exactly what you want us to focus in on. Subtlety of linework or totally omitting details can be just as important in an illustration (you don't draw every strand of hair on a figure model's head- you indicate hair or selectively show the highlights & shadows).
Again, you've got some really strong stuff here. Keep up the good work!
Thanks so much for all of the comments.
I really like the idea of drawing a hand holding the 'mechanical object' (the corkscrew) I think I will give that one a shot.
Also, thanks for all of the advice concerning the old church, I was thinking about how the roof looked 'flat' in some areas and I will definitely tweak a few things, there.
Im currently working on a still life painting that I will, hopefully, be posting soon.
hey, you're doing REALLY well!! your drawing from life/observation are exceptional! just keep drawing with a ref that'll make drawing things from imagination easier
Incessant Doodlings of a Wandering Mind (my sketchbook)
"Avoidance of what you can't draw well doesn't stimulate growth." -Cory Trego-Erdner
"Only the mediocre are always at their best."-Jean Giraudoux
Consider this a gentle whip crack right over your right shoulder to encourage you to do more work!
By the sounds of it you are getting lots of good advice so forgive me if any of this is old news to me but I thought id let you in on what Ive been told about portfolios.
Well the first thing is that at the stage we are talking about here they will be far more interested in seeing that you have solid drawing skills than the will be in seeing things from your imagination so I would stick to referenced images (although the choice of image you reference is a great way to show off your imagination, find some really interesting photos or life scenes to work from if you can). I went through this process myself a couple of years ago, I kinda followed the advice I gave you (albeit somewhat begrudgingly) and it worked out great, Im now happily in my second year!
I dont fully understand when your application will be but I wish you all the best for then, those hand studies and the church show that youve clearly got what it takes
Matt: My portfolio application is due March 1st. (so soon, i know).
Thanks for the compliments and advice!
I hope you realize that the hard work you put in now will pay off big time- either in scholarship monies for school or practical knowledge in the long run.
Keep at it!
yo dude! keep us up to date con cerning ur portfolio, i want to see your progress!
My sketchbook: http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...106521&page=11
sorry for the lack of updates, everyone, but i've been busy painting / re-decorating my room.
But I will be back to school very soon and back to a very organized art-efficient schedule!
I was expecting Liquitex, Golden, Holbein, Winsor Newtons, etc. Your brand of paint wasn't Sherwin Williams, was it?
Either way, keep working hard.
No I was painting painting (with liquitex, actually!) just an arrangement of flowers.
but i then decided to paint / re-decorate my room as well!
I promise I am going to work on some more portfolio pieces as soon as I finish typing this!
Thanks for the compliments, rsoffar!
You just reminded me that I have a new piece (a painting) to upload!
I should have it posted later tonight.
wow, that painting looks a lot worse on the computer than it does in real life.
I feel very productive!
This is the beginning of one big portfolio piece.
What we have to for the illustration portfolio is:
"Draw a still-life of simple objects similar to a sphere, cube, and cylinder (eg: an orange, a cereal box, and a coffee mug). Now do a second drawing of the still-life but with some kind of change or transformation having taken place with the objects. This exercise is meant to test your creativity."
and for the Animation portfolio (I am applying to both programs) it is basically the same description except it must also include a cone-like object.
So this is the first stage: the basic outline of the objects (for animation i will simply trace over the image in HB, but for illustration I will probably shade the objects / give them more detail)
Any ideas about what to do as far as a 'change / transformation'? (or an 'external force'?)
(Sorry for the bad quality, the paper is too big for my scanner so i had to take a photo and you can barely see some lines)
For some reason the images in my last two posts aren't showing up properly.
Maybe it's just my computer?
If this is a problem for others - does anyone know how to fix it?
You talking about how it says:
?Attached Images PQ17.jpg (77.6 KB, 0 views)
If so, after attaching them you should go to the drop-down list from the paper clip icon and click "insert all"-- If I didn't describe that well enough, there are pics on the first page of the introduction thread in the lounge.
Did that help any?
Constructive Criticism welcomed at My Sketchbook!
I will give that a try.
I just attached them the same way i did the others but for some reason they didnt work . .
It worked! Thanks so much!
All of my other pictures show up alright, though?
Last edited by Kozak; January 19th, 2008 at 03:56 PM.