Last edited by peach; February 8th, 2014 at 01:27 AM.
I think the layout looks very professional and the mood of the piece looks pretty convincing (Although I'm not really knowledgable about layout).
But the posture of the figures looks kind of awkward, they seem almost too stiff.
the guy who is crouching down has unproportionat fingers. it looks nice though, i like the style
I really like the simplistic composition of this and the color choices. It's hard to suggest any changes without changing the composition. My only suggestion would be to work on the lighting from the lantern. It looks a little too airbrushed on the figures.
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I like the composition as well, it's simple and works well.
In terms of the actual illustration - I don't know if it's because of my monitor, but everything seems a little dull, it feels like the whole image needs some contrast adjustment, or perhaps the lantern could be a little brighter?
There are a few problems with the typography.. on the spine, the type is a little too big, the descenders of the 'j' and 'g' are touching the edge of the spine. Also, the 'e' on 'Snowflake' isn't rotated as it is on the cover (that looks nice by the way ). I'm not sure if it's a good idea to have the full title only on the spine; if anything the full title should be on the cover..... although I'm not an expert by any means.
With the paragraphs of writing, perhaps making them justified would work better. It's just that they're almost justified right now, but there are some gaps (where there are long words that need to be on the next line) that are detracting from the overall presentation of the text.