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    My Stuff... crit and tip!

    Here's my thread with stuff that i want feedback and tips on..(sorry.. bad english). I'll start with this robot wip playing futuristic keyboard..

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    great start, i really like the composition and perspective you've chosen, and there is a lot of character in his hands. now, rendering - the way you render surface textures is a big part of making a piece work. since were dealing with a mechanical, metallic character and keyboard, your textures must reflect this. i can appreciate the painterly feel, but at the moment its all too organic. smooth out and broaden your brush strokes, push the highlights and values on the edges, put in some reflections, maybe some lights, etc. i would also suggest sampling some textures of metal surfaces - theres nothing wrong with using textures to improve the believability of your work. you may also want to consider a more interesting background, perhaps with speaker stacks and cables and lighting rigs and such. its up to you.

    i did a quick paint-over, just to better demonstrate what im trying to get at (pictures are worth 1000 words, after all)

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    Yes!! It's beautiful!
    great tips and paintover man.. I will dig into it at this instant...

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    an update.. still working.. stop me if something is totally f****d up.



    It's the sketchbook.. I don't get the html stuff
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    Yes! That's moving in the right direction!

    One of the bits of information I gleaned from using 3D Studio that has helped me in traditional media is the difference between "metal" and "plastic" textures. The difference? Hilights on plastic are white; hilights on metal are a lighter shade of the metal color. So on chrome, the hilights might be white, but on brass they're a light yellow.

    Also, there's no such thing as a "light red" -- red is essentially a dark color (odd but true). A red that has been lightened is pink, which is probably not what's wanted. To make red glow, make the dark parts saturated red, and the light parts yellowish/orangish (unless you were going for a pink effect, in which case -- pardon me).

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    Oh, also...I really like the shapes you've embossed out of the metal. If you did a lot of that, and it was properly foreshortened (the way the P shape is on the forearm/wrist bit), it would look very cool. It also would be a hell of a lot of hard work and difficult to pull off, so...

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    Stoat - I checked your sketchbook.. awsome stuff. I did a bit more shapes on the metal here and there.. don't want it to be too much though. also put a light yellow on the highlights.. the eye suppose to be pink.. the button on the keyboard too. The pic is electro 80's-2000 music inspired so expect more pink..
    anyhooo... Think the bot is close to finished now if someone havent somthing to add there.. I'll be starting on the keyboard now before I start on the background...



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    awesome man, thats exactly what im on about! you've taken to this with a fury that i admire now, it may be intentional, but have you forgotten to mirror the metal plate over his right hand as seen on his left hand? like this? also, the perspective is off on his right arm, which i forgot to mention. also, a little bit of lighting theory here - a red light will cast a green shadow, a yellow light a blue shadow, and so on and so forth.

    i did another quick paint-over to demonstrate what im on about. note the change to perspective of his right arm, and the subtle addition of teal-ish tint to the shadow cast by the pink-ish light. easy way to work it out - invert the colour youre using to light the object/figure, and that will give you an idea as to the colour range of the resultant shadow.

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    Helluuu.. Still working on this robot dude... I'm trying to make a synth and a theremin.. Any comments or tips on them would be much likeable...


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    THEREMIN!!!!!!!!!


    lol sorry, just had to ive u cred for drawing the coolest instrument in the world, the theremin needs more respect in music!


    theremin ftw

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    Yes it is the coolest.... Rare, kind of unknown and extremely hard to master. That's droid work...

    It's the sketchbook.. I don't get the html stuff
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    This looks pretty good so far (interesting perspective though the robot's head and face don't look like he is into what he is doing at all).

    If you want it to stand out you need a much better background (ie a stage with a crowd)

    Some reflections on the robot and some grit and dirt could help a lot so it isn't so smooth and photoshopish too.

    GL with your work

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    AshenWraith- Thanx.. Dirt and stuff is coming... i'm not so good at to make that look natural any tip on that would be great..

    well.. here's an update...
    I have started scetching the background.. any thoughts?????


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    youre not gonna make him more symmetrical as i had pointed out earlier..? great instrument design, you still need to clean up his far hand a little more, looking too organic atm. keep updating!

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    Someone have to handle the theremin...

    Stoph -- I think I want the arms to be different.. fixed the perspective on the arm thing though and tried to clean it a bit more...

    At this point I'm stuck with the background.. When I try to colour it it just lookes bad. I dont want it to be too detailed and take focus from the main characters.. I just don't know where to go from here..
    How would you do it????



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    thanks for fixing the perspective on the arm, that was bugging me to no end! i think if you wanna do the BG, you gotta loosen up on your brush strokes. simplify the render, dont get bogged down in detail. also, i think the foreground (robot + instrument) needs more contrast. ones the darks are darker and the lights are lighter, really push your values on all the little LEDs and buttons on the instrument. this will provide not only more interest and draw the viewer's eye towards the foreground, but it will allow for more cool lighting reflections off the metal of the robot. if you want it to have more of a "party" atmosphere, darken the entire background, and add some smoke from smoke machines, with lights and such cutting through it. this will leave the option open to backlight the silhouette of the robot, thus making him "pop" more

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