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    Hi, just finished this, any comments and feedback are welcome

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    The feeling of scale is applied well in this piece. I think your colours are too bland (Too much brown) and the image as a whole looks blurry. It reminds me of Monty Python and I like your signature. lats

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    I actually think the color is the best part of this. Check out the edges link in my signature, I think it would be helpful.


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    ped454 - Thanks for the critique. It's ironic, though, that in order to give the sense of more scale, I added the wing, and in the process covered a fair portion of sky, taking away color variety and making it brown 'heavy'. Good points, thanks again

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    Quote Originally Posted by Elwell View Post
    I actually think the color is the best part of this. Check out the edges link in my signature, I think it would be helpful.

    Elwell - Thanks for taking the time to direct me to the link on edges, It's great fundamental information no artist should be without. Thanks again

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    Actually, Binoched, the brown heavy bland colors has nothing to do with the sky or other colors present in the piece. It has to do with the fact that the brown you used is the same brown throughout the piece. Give your color more depth by mixing up a different variety of browns. Reddish browns, orange browns, desaturated blues, etc. Your color right now is very flat.

    Also, the body of your dragon feels a bit unresolved. Unless it's just part of the neck??? I can't tell. You have to make it more clear in the picture. Also, the spikes on the torso/lower part of the neck seem a bit unnecessary and over the top. What is their function and purpose? I mean, would a dragon ever use chest claws to spear something? And if so, then why are they pointed down?
    Also, to improve upon the story telling element of your piece, demonstrate some kind of conflict or express the severity of the encounter. Right now I feel like two old enemies happened to just bump into each other at the super market. You showed the after effects of the dragon blowing fire. Why not show the dragon actually blowing fire and the figure blocking it with all his might.

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    here's a little paint over I did to demonstrate the story telling component.

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    Your edges are really soft on the left side of the picture. That's probably one of the reasons my eye keeps on going to the dragon's mouth - it's the part that's rendered the sharpest. In this particular composition, it doesn't seem like the dragon mouth should be the main focus, so you may want to keep that in mind for future work...where is the focal point? How will you make the focal point the part of the picture that draws the viewer's eye the strongest?

    There's a good tutorial here regarding the use of things like contrast, texture, etc. to draw an eye to a certain point in a drawing.
    http://www.itchstudios.com/psg/art_tut.htm


    ...and by golly, it looks like the author updated somewhat after two years! Goody.

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    I am baffled about what the wings are doing, where they're coming from, and how they relate to what's going on.

    Baffled, I say.

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    Quote Originally Posted by dogfood View Post
    I am baffled about what the wings are doing, where they're coming from, and how they relate to what's going on.

    Baffled, I say.
    WHOA, i just noticed that too, now that you mention it.

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    Here's an update to some of my errors

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    I think that the stomach-scales (or whatever you prefer to name em) are too big in comparison with the smaller scales, also his left wing is on the right side of his head..this is confusing, anatomically impossible and very unreal, he really cant fly like this, also I would go for that story-telling component from up above that looks better, even if you only let the dragon breathe some fire. maybe you can shrink the jaw a bit on the back, where it meets the skull and the neck. the head of a dragon should be streamlined so that it resembles a dragons personallity, sly and mean.

    hope this helpes some, other than these points it looks ok,

    greetz Dagga

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    I think it might help to shrink the image, throw up a big canvas around it, and sketch in the entire dragon's body so you know exactly what is going where.

    Right now the wings are very disjointed and look like either there are other dragons just outside the scene, or his wings have been broken or hacked off and stuck around the landscape.

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