Not much to say, I'll let the piece speak for itself. Comments and critiques are greatly appreciated!
nice start. The style of the front figure doesnt seem to match the rest of the piece. The hands could use a lot of touching up on both figures. And just a little thing - her neck disappears against the wall because they are almost the same color
It's not very clear who's the master and who's the apprentice. Maybe you should add a few attributes to the pic to further display the type of character. Below are some ideas. You may disagree with these specific attributes cause they don't fit in your story, but the difference between them has to be portrayed somehow.
- More experienced, so should look more calm and relaxed
- More battle experience Could be scarred, more muscles etc.
- Could be either more refined while practical clothes, or shabby old man
- Young and lean
- Nervous or excited for the opportunity to beat his master
- Outfit less refined or complex, since he hasn't had the opportunity yet to gain social status, fame and money through his line of work. Alternately pompous and dressed with impractical jewelry and such, to try to show off
Perspective-wise, you picked a scene that is elegantly simple, and therefore must be as perfect as an egg, because imperfections really stand out in such simple settings. Either you faked the perspective, or you rushed it, and it shows.
Composition problems: watch out for tangents, such as the parallel and horizontal line that kiss the edges of the blue dude’s head. Be aware of where your camera is, and how it lines up the characters against the background. For instance, the blue guy would be made more prominent and menacing if the camera were slightly lower, so that his head was above the horizontal green stripe. Also beware putting anything symmetrical in the composition, such as the pillar in the top center. The whole composition could be improved by cropping off the left side just at the edge of the woman.
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My only critique really is add more detail. I am struck by this image. It reminds me of some of Ralph McQuarrie's concept art, or some of the concept art for the movie Tron.
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