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    Hi guys,
    I created new composition for my sketch - meduse and I would like to know how do you like it. If you have some comments it will be wery cool - befor I start painting. Some suggestion for ocean colors maby?
    I imagined a curve how people will looking to image, das it work?
    On the right side I have nothing, if you have idea 10x?

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    I keep looking up and down the length of the jelley since his body is the heaviest in compositional weight. The small fish was an afterthought, and only noticed it until I noticed the shiny bit at the end of the jelly.

    I'd try to think of an example to make it work, maybe a paintover showing the fishie in the foreground more to help balance it, but I'm sick and need to go to bed

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    Just my philosophy here but I'd concentrate less on having a finished piece and more on learning as much as you can.

    Anyhow. The path you've drawn isn't far off. It's contrasts and the lack of contrast that's going to be the biggest factor in eye direction. You may zoom out and view the piece a little more abstractly, deciding what needs more contrast and what needs less in order to control the viewers eye as you wish.

    Cheers!

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    Thnx guys.

    Idiot Apaty - I worked on contrasts and played with colors too. Big thnx for your commets. I like very much your Step-by-steps and videos.

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    The yellow is really vivid and it seems like the fish is lit by something other than the light there. The lines also really flatten out the creatures.

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    vivid fish

    Justin - I worked on vivid fish. I changed yellow color to be more blue green and I added some shadows to better integration with environmemt.
    For lines - I want create some animated look with lines.
    I added little bit more lights come from left top corner to have more contrast.
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    I worked on enviremnent lighting on the bottom of the picture.
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    Thanks for coments - I will try to put some caustic lights on jelly-fish.

    I made New Speedpainting 10x for comments too

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    I think the next to last one works best... The saturation of the sea on the right draws the attention away from the fishes...

    I'd like to see you at least tone down the outlines on the highlighted part of the jellyfish, they look really out of place there. Just use a light gray instead of black if you still want them there.

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    perhaps try adding a third visual element in the foreground (odd numbers tend to have a more harmonious visual aesthetic)

    its good that youre thinking if how the viewers ee will move through the piece, but with only two elements it simple goes from one to the other, then settles on the more complex of the two.

    this could be a very interesting image to add unusual textures given the subject matter, it'd be fun to see what qualitites that'd give the piece.

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    Grief - They are three animals, in the left top corner is a shark who comming!! :-)))
    I did it more visible now.

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    I think the lines are a little too thick, they're especially jarring where you see the jellyfish highlight against the light background. Also the jellyfish looks like it's casting a shadow more on a plane behind it than through the volume of the water. On the other hand, nice corals, and I like the little fish.

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