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September 30th, 2007 #1
10X for COMMENTS
I created new composition for my sketch - meduse and I would like to know how do you like it. If you have some comments it will be wery cool - befor I start painting. Some suggestion for ocean colors maby?
I imagined a curve how people will looking to image, das it work?
On the right side I have nothing, if you have idea 10x?
10X for comments guys
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I want to do it realy diffrently as my first painting
Last edited by cucak; November 1st, 2007 at 11:40 AM.
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I keep looking up and down the length of the jelley since his body is the heaviest in compositional weight. The small fish was an afterthought, and only noticed it until I noticed the shiny bit at the end of the jelly.
I'd try to think of an example to make it work, maybe a paintover showing the fishie in the foreground more to help balance it, but I'm sick and need to go to bed
October 2nd, 2007 #3
- I'd say, loose the little fish below, and concentrate on the jelly-fish...
October 2nd, 2007 #4
Just my philosophy here but I'd concentrate less on having a finished piece and more on learning as much as you can.
Anyhow. The path you've drawn isn't far off. It's contrasts and the lack of contrast that's going to be the biggest factor in eye direction. You may zoom out and view the piece a little more abstractly, deciding what needs more contrast and what needs less in order to control the viewers eye as you wish.
October 6th, 2007 #5
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October 13th, 2007 #7
Justin - I worked on vivid fish. I changed yellow color to be more blue green and I added some shadows to better integration with environmemt.
For lines - I want create some animated look with lines.
I added little bit more lights come from left top corner to have more contrast.
10x for comments.
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Last edited by cucak; October 14th, 2007 at 09:32 PM.
October 14th, 2007 #8
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October 18th, 2007 #10
I think the next to last one works best... The saturation of the sea on the right draws the attention away from the fishes...
I'd like to see you at least tone down the outlines on the highlighted part of the jellyfish, they look really out of place there. Just use a light gray instead of black if you still want them there.
October 18th, 2007 #11
perhaps try adding a third visual element in the foreground (odd numbers tend to have a more harmonious visual aesthetic)
its good that youre thinking if how the viewers ee will move through the piece, but with only two elements it simple goes from one to the other, then settles on the more complex of the two.
this could be a very interesting image to add unusual textures given the subject matter, it'd be fun to see what qualitites that'd give the piece.
October 21st, 2007 #12
October 22nd, 2007 #13
I think the lines are a little too thick, they're especially jarring where you see the jellyfish highlight against the light background. Also the jellyfish looks like it's casting a shadow more on a plane behind it than through the volume of the water. On the other hand, nice corals, and I like the little fish.
October 22nd, 2007 #14
lookin good on the updates... jsut a suggestion but i think the shadows on the fish could be pushed back a slight bit more.. im just comparing them to the shadows on the jellyfish and they get extremely dark without having the dangling light right in front of its face.... and maybe some highlights on the dangly light onto the jellyfish tentacles.. (just some suggestions) ... good work though .. keep at it
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I agree with the lines on the jellyfish(the part of him that's in the light)seem odd..they make the image very flat, while the background is pretty realistic. If you'd tone down those lines, I don't think the other lines would be so bothersome. I like the character you've given the two fish-expecially the jellyfish with that grumpy expression. It's looking good so far, it just needs a bit more harmony between that realistic-ish background and the more cartoony characters.
November 1st, 2007 #16
Thanks guys for suggestions. I will work on it.