Hi everyone!! I'm Squishy, a second year undergrad at the School of the Art Institute of Chicago, looking to get into the animation program there.
The image is the first piece of digital art I've ever made that I've been proud of, but the folks at deviantart are utterly unhelpful when it comes to a serious critique, so i figured I'd come here! Please DON'T BE GENTLE, I'm trying to develop my style even further.
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Ok, if you meant the guy on the lotus to be humanoid then you're having a lot of anatomy issues:
- Shoulders lopsided and those muscles on either side of his neck are over-developed. His right (our left) is slightly better but you need to bring the line that seperates shoulder from arm up higher.
-Entire torso too short
-Based on the angle the lotus thing is tilted we should be able to see some of his thighs
-I can't quite tell what side of his hands the thumbs are on, but they're meant to be on the far side.
I wouldn't neccessarily bother fixing them, just move on and study a whole lot of anatomy.
Couple of other things:
-If you are going to include design elements like that star thing at the bottom they absolutely have to be symmetrical. It's not like this is hard to do in a digital painting, so no excuses. Also having it so close but not quite in the centre of the frame is throwing the whole thing off. Same goes for the lotus.
- That eye in the corner is distracting and totally unnecessary. Believe me you already have enough 'weird' stuff going on in this picture.
Alot of this is just my opinion of course, but I hope it helps and gives you something to think about Keep on working it's a very cool idea
I'm bad at sketchbooks, have a tumblr!
*nod nod* yeah, I understand about the anatomy. Now that you point it out, I can see it. Getting the torso and arms exactly right is difficult for me, but that just means I need to practice more, doesn't it?
I kinda like the eye....ah well. that must be a personal preference thing.
As for the non-symmetrical triangles, I guess I shoulda been using a ruler while sketching it out. I'll keep that in mind next time.
Thank you for the solid crit!!
ouch!... the over all color saturation is very 60s if you are trying for a retro design thats fine. but having the background and the image both super bright colors means it is really difficult to focus on any of them.
I find the very symetrical mandala like figure to be disconcertingly layered with not quite clean graphic lines
whereas this adds a human touch to an other wise fairly sterile composition, it also ends up looking sloppy in terms of graphic design. depends on your goal here...
I would also encourage you to think about what it is in this images that impelle dyou to draw it. and what makes your rendition unique.... emphaisse those features... and you could have an intreresting work
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