I've been pondering this pen and ink illustration for some time now and I'm just not happy with where it is going and I was hoping a couple of new eyes with some fresh perspective could assist me? Please take a look and I'd appreciate any C+C you can offer.
Basically this character is sitting alone in a cabin. He's just been jilted by his lover and wakes up to hear her dear john confession on the handy dandy reel to reel. He's smoking his cigar and brooding...
The first more detailed one is the primary idea but I'm not convinced... Any input? What about composition? It's supposed to be in viniette ala Joseph Clement Cole.
the 2nd one is a small thumbail of an alternate version of this idea.