Cigarettes plz critique them

[821hero]

Hello i am a new in comunity and i wanna know some of your observation to my 2 pictures and plz critique them and i had a question witch one is better??


http://www.ukazto.com/img/ciga-cleanssmall.jpg

http://www.ukazto.com/img/ciga-dirtsmall.jpg

[FlipMcgee]

I like the first one than the second. Maybe add some ashes.

If there's a message that's being expressed by the butts, I'm not getting it. Like why the dead center composition, for one.

Nicely painted the first one.

[JasonUK]

I like the first much better and think it looks very good butt I think the shadow under the butt doesn't look very good. It's not natural enough.
Can I ask why you've done these?

[Seedling]

You have done some good oservation of a cigarette here. And you used it to do a pair of color-studies. That's great! There is no need to pick a right one and a wrong one. Just learn from them both, and keep going.

While you are at it, when you post here, why not take the opportunity to improve your English writing skills, too?