5 pages of fun

[Grendel]

page 1
http://images.deviantart.com/large/indyart/freehand/machined1colored.jpg
page 2
http://www.underbloom.com/staging/grendel/22-copy12.jpg
page 3
http://www.underbloom.com/staging/grendel/pg33-copy2g.jpg
page 4
http://www.underbloom.com/staging/grendel/pge44-cop24a.jpg
page 5
http://www.underbloom.com/staging/grendel/55-copy9c.jpg

pencil- me
color- underbloom
story concept- ty gorton

[thomasaurus]

i shat mysefl when i scrolled to the last panel

everything is wonderful, you and underbloom are a powerful team!

[endregan]

dood that so rocks. you could make awesome comics !!! I love your style :)

[Toni Caputo]

Jesus! That´s friggin cool!!! :chug:

[enoc]

wow great job the effects especially are well done

:D [TASKINLUDE] (http://active-x.net/taskinlude/) :D

[behemot5]

i like thecolored version

[BluePencilArtist]

:eek: Sweet :eek:

[Elmo Lester]

A-fucking-mazing! great idea and execution. amazing effects, i'm curious how did u acheive that swirly smoke in the bottom frame?

[daniele]

Great!! really good dark style. I had some difficulties in understanding sequences in 2 points..:

1. Page 2 last strip. Is somewhat non well linked to the first strip on page 3.

The spheres are coming near the window? (the face is reflected on the first sphere? or is it like a monitor?)

In case spheres were in front of the window, a part of the wooden stick bitween the glasses of the window in the very first close position and some glassing mirroring or blue filter should help a lot linking to the next panel that has the opposite point of view.. Is he boy's point of view "he stay near to the window and just a thin glass divide us from these alien objects" !!!

(maybe if you changed this strip with a "speheres point of view" maybe approaching to the house in the background "in the dark blue nignt", the sequence should worked better.)

2. The ending is ambiguos, if the boy if somehow mutated in the creature of the last page, you shall put some visual relation between the boy and the creature. You stay 1/2 page on the spheres attaching the boy and eliminate the mutation too quickly.

You stay almost all of the 4th panel with 3 boxes telling the same scene in the same place, if u make it with a big, half page box, u can leave the broken window point of view, maybe with some glow from inside (announcing that something is happening) and the chair flying away in the bottom of the page. U can link it well with the 5th splash page.. with the creature.


greetings !!!!
:chug:

[Cashmere]

Grendel, Underbloom, Ty Gorton, you are great! I had the impression to see a movie scene! :beer:

[Aidan]

Alright, I believe I'm gonna dream about those eyes tonight...

Great work! The atmosphere on page 3 is absolutely amazing...

[Manta_Ray]

Great story but even better technique...totally suits the dream sequences....are you guys using Painter or PS and do you have a particular method?

[Gyst Hyu]

*falls onto floor drooling*

[sbqnddz]

Hows the superman come in this way,now I got some answers,really cool pics!!how about some more pages?

[Grendel]

the next stuff youll proabably se with me and bloom is some ronin stuff...this was a submission peice for a larger pitch. it still needs to be lettered and what not.

[killing.people]

the steam and smoke look awesome on that last image.

[dajovion]

Wow, I've never seen sequential work like this before. I love your style.

[Layil]

its great to see sequential work up here. yeay! fellow cartoonist geek! :D
anyhoo, i really like the pages. the sequencing is a bit blurry at times, i agree with daniele's points, and it is just a tad repetitive in a few places, but the overall effect is great. very original style. its cool to see photoshopped comics that arent of the cut and paste pictures variety. my last critique would be that there seems to be alot of darkness in your panels. i understand that this is a feel your going for, but in places, (specifically the wheelchair sequence) it makes it hard to read. look at your last panel, how the green background makes the figure pop? id try to get a bit more of that effect. perhaps thin out your panel borders too, its adding to the darkness... just my two cents.
but over all, it looks great! want to see more!! :evilbat:

[Grendel]

Thanks for all th ecomments and crits...I really do apreciate it. it helps to know there ae people who take time out to give their perspective on work which you only see from your own personal view.

[Hyper_Psycho]

Whoa ! this is amazing !

[Grendel]

Thanks HP

[helix7]

That last image floored me. Fantastic work.

[ilkka]

wow...really brilliant work!!...:jawdrop: