peek a boo

[midknight523]

http://home.earthlink.net/~melis523/data/pg14-.jpg

http://home.earthlink.net/~melis523/data/pg15.jpg

thanks for looking

[Shortydiva]

The dude's head getting beamed looks a little bit too mushy and goopy. Why is the first panel different from the rest, as in shouldn't he be looking over his right shoulder for the rest?

[mrgrumble]

interesting start man. anything with an exploding head is top notch in my book. but you start in the first panel with two sets of seperate characters, and since the ones on the right have the speech bubble, i immediately assume that you're going to zoom in on them (there hasn't been any relation between the characters so that you know their talking through headphones to eachother) so just work on the continuity there.
also, i like the SPLORK! effect, but i think the blams are just to gradient ridden and don't fit with your nice pen and ink style. mabye a more gritty sound text?
i want more!!