WIP comic strip-20

[JERI]

WIP, need your opinions on this. Is it clear what's going on at this point? In particular the last panel - can you tell clearly what's what in it? If you can't, which object do you think is the most confusing?

http://img55.imageshack.us/img55/6835/comic2zs0.jpg

Your opinions are very much appreciated.

[Melis...]

I take it the mouse is being disected? It is a bit hard to distinguish between objects, but I think that could be cleared up if you color it. Maybe put a bolder outline around the people as well? I think it would be helpful overall if it has varied lineweights.

[Justin.]

HAH! I could tell perfectly. GOod work!

[Serena-]

the object that is confusing is the contrast of the lack of detail in all of the drawings, accept the close up of the face, which is over exagerated in comparison to all the rest of the drawing. It sticks out and pulls all the attention to it... what's it's point?

I can tell all the details, and the idea here though. I think it's a very interesting piece. Very good work, and nicely done aside from afore mentioned. Thank you for sharing. :)

[JERI]

Melis... - Have finished inking and put in varying lineweights.
Justin Oaksford - Merci.
Serena - The detailed face contrasts with the simple comic style of the rest and acts as a visual non sequitur :). Have added details and finished inking, hopefully the problems you mentioned are now resolved.

Thanks for the input guys :).

http://img237.imageshack.us/img237/7359/comic200617bgu6.jpg

[Infinit]

MOOOOOOOOOOORBID
and fun
as always, reads perfect