Dancing girl

[Wildah]

One of my very first finished pieces. I'm kinda curious about your opinions about the inking. Any mistakes with lineweight?
But any C&C is welcome.

[Cookiedough]

Maybe a li'l thicker line around her left leg/shoe.

Please give the girl a bra. Knocking out yourself with your boobs is not fun and the boobs complain too later.

Wish her expression shared more of her feelings. She seems kinda bored.

Her left leg (our right) is broken. The way her calf and ankle are positioned... ouch! Make that foot point inward, that should solve it.

Add more bling bling to the girl too. She's partying!

[JL.Alfaro]

shes not bored, shes one of those serious dancers, you know the type-looking all serious while doing the roger rabbit...jk I love the movement of the boobs, its a little exaggerated, but I think that was the point, (our) right side lower leg lines looking kinda thin, left shoulder might be better off hidden. and cookie is right about the expression, put a lil sexy smile on her bro

[armando]

Some strange line and form choices: thoracic arches are too big and too round, they look like boobs themselves; the line used for the adducters of the thigh on the right leg is unneccessary, and the hammies wouldn't be seen from that angle. The light on it makes it look like a thin jutting tendon form, instead of the fat subtle egg like form that it shold be. The line for the sartorius(?) is wrong. The line for the sterno-mastoid is unneccessary.
The line work itself is okay. There's a bit too much variety in each line for such a simple style, for example the outer thigh of her left leg could have been drawn with one line instead of two.
I don't agree with the bouncing boob crit, as this reminds of Rosie Perez's dance at the beginning of that one Spike Lee movie. Also, since she's working it hard I expect a serious look on her face, an expression of exertion.

[Wildah]

Thx for the replies peeps.
The boobs i kinda like this way. They add a lot of movement.
I tried incorporating your crits in the fix posted below. I only moved in the foot slightly probably not enough. Got rid of the sartorius. The line still there is suppose to show the Vastus Medialis. I guess the sartorius would be higher up. I also changed the calf muscles on her right leg. Shortened the adductor line and changed the shadow.
I changed the lines on her calfs slightly. and erased the sterno-mastoid.

Again thx.

[armando]

It's an improvement. Probably could put some of that enertia in the afro too. I liked that sartorius line on her left leg. I meant the adductors on her right leg, I was thinking go for a simpler cylinder sort of form. The lighting you used makes it seem as if it's plane faces forward rather than inwards, like it's a ridge. I also figured the adductors would overlap the hamstrings, so you have three choices if you redraw it: overlap with light; overlap no light; no overlap no light. Just an example of what that could be, I don't like my overlap at all though, the direction of the line needs to be changed.