View Full Version : monkey see monkey do
ChrisMayernik
September 13th, 2006, 06:34 PM
Bang bang. Finished. Any suggestions would be great because I will come back to it later on but now I have other things I need to work on.
Here is the sketch and base value layer I used to get started. These are both really simple because most of my designing was to be done as I painted.
nofingers
September 13th, 2006, 07:27 PM
Very cool piece. The vehicle itself is very well done. The design, coloring, details are very good. My two notes would be the tracks being in front of the vehicle instead of behind it (is it going in reverse?) and the man on the right, the arms look awkward, his left upper arm looks longer than his right.
Reality Forge
September 13th, 2006, 08:29 PM
:O Thats beautiful! I haves me my new wallpaper!
jadefoodog
September 13th, 2006, 08:31 PM
lol love the chick floating in the clouds
ruzkin
September 13th, 2006, 08:35 PM
No possible crits on the vehicle, but the soldier on the right is holding his gun very uncomfortably. I have never seen a soldier carry a gun flat infront of himself in that manner.
Scorned1
September 13th, 2006, 08:39 PM
One word "Impressive"
One question though, was it your intention to have the vehicle seemed to be rolling backward? because there aren't any track marks behind it or did it just made a hard right turn ? I'm nip-picking but I don't care about the logic. Beautiful piece. Keep them coming.
Johnnyhorse
September 13th, 2006, 08:42 PM
The vehicle is indeed glorious, but it certainly looks like all of the energy was used up in it. The lines on above the clouds are a little bothersome (perhaps its just the red though), the sun's rays are generally split up into shafts by the clouds descending, not the other way around.
The people are much too rigid; Their poses seem to lack the freedom that anatomical joints allow us (ballsocket joints, that is). and the man in front demands as much detail as the vehicle.
I'm sorry to provide so much negative criticism, but I feel that the vehicle is done so well that the rest of the picture should not be able to get away with distracting the viewer from your superb lighting (especially the front of the vehicle and those treads, wonderful!).
ChrisMayernik
September 13th, 2006, 08:43 PM
These are all fantastic critiques. Lol I had'nt even noticed theres no tracks behind the vehicle. I will paint those in. The vehicle is going forward and I added tracks infront as if to say others have gone before it.
Thanks for pointing out the problems with the soldier. I totaly see what you all are saying. Going to fix that also. Thanks.
Johnnyhorse . yes, please negitive is good. I think any artist wanting to learn would rather hear whats bad about their image instead of whats good. The lines above the clouds are actually just style which I used to point to the vehicle but they are too pronounced so I will fade them back. It's true I spent most of my time on the vehicle. actually at the beginning I just was doing a rendering of a vehicle for my portfolio but then felt as if It could be something more so I proceeded to add elements. I agree about the people. I'm going to do abunch of illustrations with people the next few days and I'l see if I can overcome the stiffness.
Tyranx
September 13th, 2006, 08:58 PM
ack, get yer website fixed! I wanna see more! ;)
Great vehicle design and render btw.
flex mathews
September 13th, 2006, 11:13 PM
wow, very nice piece. great design. i havent seen you in a while. you should stop by sometime.
DavePalumbo
September 13th, 2006, 11:17 PM
was going to mention the soldier's awkward method of carrying his rifle, but I see it's already on your radar. So I'll instead just say that the vehicle is smokin'
you may actually be better off just losing that guy altogether
Johnnyhorse
September 14th, 2006, 12:55 AM
Okay, I just looked at your sketchbook and there is NO reason why those people should look like that. Those foreshortened arms and shoulders are really accurate. Now, just translate that over to this picture (or just get infront of a mirror and take note of how your shoulders and arms are positioned similar to a soldier. And while you're at it, add some superflous doodads to that soldier (his vest, arms, and helmet) that add some roughness/detail--it'll make it more fun to paint, i swear.
frixon
September 14th, 2006, 07:10 AM
impressive work on the vehicle.
Staz Johnson
September 14th, 2006, 07:35 AM
I think it's great. Even the faults concerning the soldier in the f/g don't bother me much. The only thing I'm not convinced about is the ghostly image in the sky, not sure what place something like that has in a concept piece.
strych9ine
September 14th, 2006, 08:55 AM
Nice piece man, dig the design and color palette.
voraz
September 14th, 2006, 10:28 AM
the vehicle looks really great as does the background in the left, but the sky and the background it the right I don't like so much.
cheers
viag
September 14th, 2006, 10:33 AM
nice and dynamic brush strokes , great colors choice !
buraisuko
September 14th, 2006, 04:58 PM
beauutiful details! it has such a refreshing feel to it!
i do think the proportions on the guy could use some work, but the tank is just...great. :)
mattb68
September 14th, 2006, 05:30 PM
That vehicles amazing, you've done a really nice job with the wheels and tracks. Your colour choices are also spot on. On the whole it is very impressive!
vogemudet
September 14th, 2006, 05:36 PM
The vehicle is very well done... I like that sky... keep keeping on...Good luck.
Remember it's not work....ppl say oh that's alot of work, you've done so much work, can I see your work? I say it's fun. A friend mentioned that so and so artist never had cable well I added who would if you are such and such artist.
Also I remember this story: Vasari who was a muralist and had all his work taken down before he passed away [to make room for Raphael and Michelangelo murals] told Michelangelo I can do an entire mural in the time you can do 2 or three figures...Michelangelo replied " so one can see". That one always cracks me up.
Staz i just read your thread and viola saw the woman... didn't even catch that. Is it liberty or freedom tragically escaping from the battlescene... i know don't explain... enjoy. LOL
Cheers mate.
Pavel Sokov
September 15th, 2006, 10:46 AM
vehicle is done very well
Pavel Sokov
September 15th, 2006, 10:49 AM
One word "Impressive"
One question though, was it your intention to have the vehicle seemed to be rolling backward? because there aren't any track marks behind it or did it just made a hard right turn ? I'm nip-picking but I don't care about the logic. Beautiful piece. Keep them coming.
common guys, dont be dumb, there was obviously another vehicle in front of it that already went this route.
when u have escort missions and such there is more then 1 vehicle following each other
bdfoster
September 15th, 2006, 03:14 PM
I'm with Staz. I think the idea of the figure in the clouds is neat, but I don't feel like it adds to the piece. You're already on my other big pick-up, which is the soldier. Usually the butt of the rifle is under the trigger arm, which contributes to the awkwardness.
Possibly having the vehicle slightly farther out of lines with the tracks in front of it will give more of that feeling that they are from another vehicle before it? Just a thought. Killer stuff on the whole.
Ionic
September 15th, 2006, 09:07 PM
one thing :)... why are the tracks infront of the vehicle? instead of behind?
Cicinimo
September 17th, 2006, 04:47 AM
Awesome. Glad you pushed the smoke plume back. Turned out great!
Chuck,mate.
September 17th, 2006, 06:53 AM
really great colors and lighting.
i got a problem with the soldier in the forground -
he`s face is awkward, and the way he`s holding the gun is very weird.
other than that - solid piece. i like it alot.
:)
Azza
September 17th, 2006, 07:47 AM
about the soldier in front: shouldn't he be taller? I mean, considering the other figures right in perspective, his head should be a little over those of the others...
the rest, well that's just stunning:teeth:
DARYL
September 17th, 2006, 08:06 AM
hey man, awesome overall. I'm not sure if this crit is important when doing something conceptual rather than a painting in a traditional sense but you might want to do some more changes on all areas you copy pasted, like the vehicle wheels and front lamps. I can totally see the point why doing this but it was also quite obvious. also, the dark grey area above the caterpillar(?) looks a bit less detailed/ cleaner than everything else.
btw did you do a 3d mockup on this one?
thanks for sharing, totally great.
iro0707
September 17th, 2006, 09:25 AM
Good work!
The tone let me feel good.But the shape of cloud ,is this sth means you want to express?
Charlie_2.0
September 17th, 2006, 01:16 PM
Lose the soldier from the foreground, it's got some issues
claudeEGYPT
September 17th, 2006, 01:19 PM
I second Charlie 2.0
Otherwise, you had my jaw dropping on everything else.
Massikka
September 17th, 2006, 01:29 PM
this is super nice! the vehicle is amazing and so is the coloring! :]
so cool!
the clouds are really nice especially the female in there...
the lines over the clouds seem a bit irritating, they are too straight compared to the soft clouds.. but you knew that already ;P
thank you, this is really inspiring work
rockdraw
September 18th, 2006, 04:06 AM
nice idea with the woman in the clouds! what is the symbolic meaning of this?
pretty details!
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