new photographs

[KendraJ.K.]

i want some critiques...please :( eeeep!

to see more go to: www.darkalaria69.deviantart.com


Serenity
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/8-31-060622.jpg

Hazy Afternoon
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/8-31-060682.jpg

After the Strom II
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/8-25-060553.jpg
Oranges
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/8-11-060502.jpg

Time Goes By
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/2006reunion0972.jpg

Rain Droplets
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/8-25-060392.jpg

Sorrow
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/7-26-060172-1.jpg


Banished to the Corner
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/amy8-4-060562-2.jpg


Neck and Collar Bone II
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/amy8-4-061372.jpg

[Rhynome]

Here comes the criticism - uh, please bear in mind that much of this is based on my own views, I don't know what others are going to say. I'm going to try and use colour to make it stop looking like a block of text. If you want a e-hug, read only the blue bits.

Serenity is a beautiful picture, sadly though, maybe it has a bit too much free space on the right hand side of the photo; it's hard for the eye to stick on the flower and the centre of the photo is fairly busy, with the reeds and so on. It's just not natural for the eye to look at the whole of the flower, it is easy to catch the bits to the right though.


Hazy Afternoon again has a problem with whereabouts of the objects/focus. That flower, right infront of us, screaming 'Look at me, I want attention.' My initial urge would be to suggest you move the flower to the centre of the picture, maybe look down a little more and take a photo from there. Though I suppose that wouldn't be what you'd want because that's not what you were taking the photo of in the first place. So I know it may sound a bit evil... but you should have torn that flower off, after all it comes from behind the bud.
Also, what's that thing to the bottom right of the picture? Some kind of Disco Caterpillar?.. Discatpillar!, discopillar!, and so on...
Maybe have taken the photo of the top portion of the plant, instead of with the out of focus flower. All in all the picture just sadly seems a bit too crowded, like a confused jigsaw... the water-line doesn't help much either, but that's unavoidable really I suppose.


After the Maelstrom... TWOOO, this time, it's personal! (I'm so, so sorry, it's morning.)
Those undefined shapes, top left, they're confusing me... Leaves, right? It just seems sort of wrong. Also the waterdroplet/leaf with water droplet seems to be, again, not quite the subject of the photograph and I really want it to be, but my eye is drawn towards the bright background as opposed to the dark foreground and the clouds, and those shapes (Trees) at the bottom, and then GAH, the water droplet wants attention! I know in this case it's meant to have it, but it seems sort of subserviant to the clouds and the trees and so on. So in this case it's either 'Make the photo about the background, eliminate other distractions.' or 'Make the photo about the water droplet, move the camera slightly, or so on.'


Oranges, no crits on the oranges, 'cept maybe the front right orange could do with some ever so slight more right movage. Other than that I love the photo with all my cold, dark, blackened heart.


Time Goes By, I see what you wanted to do here, and you oh so nearly got it (actually, you probably did, I'm just nasty), but it seems a tad fuzzy, and that pale patch does distract a bit also. It's still a really nice photo, and I guess that if the object that you're taking the photo of is small then you have no choice other than that focus, but it also looks like the camera may have moved a little. A further point is that maybe a slightly steeper angle of attack on the wall? It's definately not dreadful though.


Rain Droplets - do you have a higher res version? I want a new desktop picture.


I think I've seen Sorrow before, I'm positive I have. Nice portrait is all I really have to say on it, the shadows from the hair are nice, basically. The shadow from the nose I'm not a great fan of; now I know it's going to be hard to sort that out, but if you had the lightsource as to give a lesser shadow on the nose, then moved your hair forwards (if possible) then you might be able to eliminate the noseshadow to a nice level and still keep the hairshadow. From what I've seen of professional portraits you don't really get shadows like that on people's faces. Then again, their lighting equipment is a bit more... expensive, but I suppose just see what you can do?


Banished to the Corner - Nice, very nice.
Neck and Collar Bone II - Purrrrr.



That watermark bothers me. Maybe something ever so slightly smaller, '(c) KJK' or something... I dunno.

Despite what I've said I do actually think they're mostly good photos, thanks for sharing these with us.

Toodles for now.

[Y-S]

How you do that serenity and hazy afternoon one? You change focus settings, right?

[KendraJ.K.]

Y-S:
yeah...you have to change the apature(i dont think that is spelled right lol)....

Rhynome:
uh wow...lol:) thanksso much for all the critics and i so see whart you are saying with most of them...i use the watermark becuase im paranoid about rippers..lol....i know most of my stuff isnt good enough for people to take and want to use as their own but im paranoid anyways...again thank so much ^_^

[Le Gab]

You wanted crits... and you got crits. :)

You see, the good thing is that Rhynome gave you the full crit book. A lot to read. Bad thing is he covered the whole crit part thus no one can give any more crits. :D

:Hugs Rhynome:
Well, i dunno if he said it, i didnt have patience to read the whole thing but her is one suggestion from me as well: drop the watermark :)


Cheerio!

[Y-S]

Also may I mention, hell of a post there, Rhyme

Thanks Kendra, you see I'm kinda new at photography so....sorry for being new lol

[sezcat]

yeah, i pretty much agree with what everyone else has said, especially about the watermark :P
but with oranges, what's the black on the left towards the top? i dont know, it kinda annoys me [but its still a great photo :)]

[KendraJ.K.]

heres a few more pictures...and again thanks so much for all the feed back so far

Eternity of Death
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/8-31-060752-1.jpg

Les Soeurs
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/5-16-060542.jpg


http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/8-31-060072.jpg
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/8-31-060152.jpg

for the next one i was trying to practice implied lines...for a picture i have to do for my photography class
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/8-31-060112.jpg

next one i was praciting with flash photogrpahy after it had rained...not sure if i like how it turned out
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/8-25-060692.jpg


Towering Yellow
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/6-23-060772-1.jpg

this was a spontanous portrait...
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/starbucks0033-1.jpg

an experiment with water and red paint
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/6-8-060682.jpg

another spontaneous photo but it was a bike on the back of a truck that i thought looked really kewl
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y27/Ziarre69/6-5-060072.jpg