Need good critiques, please!

[Fireflights]

I decided to post 2 WIP's and one doodle, for variety. :)

As far as critiques go, though, I mostly meant them for the colored piece. Is there anything anatomically wrong? Anything that jumps out at you for being wrong in any way? I just don't want to detail this part of the drawing and then realize that something with the basic structure is wrong.

Crits and comments welcome, thank you! :D

[evildragonfire]

I like this alot. The body seems very solid, and the face is realistic. The light from the fire would cast a light on the curvature of her breast, and the stomach area (depending on where the light actually is, of course would depend on how much). I cannot wait to see more on this. :D

[Fireflights]

I like this alot. The body seems very solid, and the face is realistic. The light from the fire would cast a light on the curvature of her breast, and the stomach area (depending on where the light actually is, of course would depend on how much). I cannot wait to see more on this. :D

Yeah, while shading the face, I got ahead of myself (as I have a habit of doing, haha) and went ahead and added the 2nd lightsource. Have no fear though, it'll all be added in the appropriate areas later. :)

I'm not done shading at all, especially the stomach area/arms/etc...but I'm glad you like it! Thanks for the comments. :)

[armando]

Construction and proportion look right. The colors will need work, it's so grey right now. Also the moon should be placed higher, it looks to be a side frontal lighting. Rendering around the eyes could use more subtlety: that groove caused by orbicularis oculi should be more of a meeting of planes, it's too deep and continues too far across the face. Also the outer corner of the orbit should take some shade, it's as if there's no skull. Nasolabial fold is to dark, another place that's more of a neeting of planes than a groove in someone so young. My suggestion would be to define the planes of the head more to help with placing tones and to give more solidity. Yeah, just needs more finnessing in regards to showing form change. "Form change = value change." Scott Robertson.

[Infinit]

nothing to crit here rly everything seems right
just keep going I'm curious what you'll come up with

[dogfood]

Man, I'm liking this.

Moonlight really isn't going to tell us her outfit is green. It may imply it, may whisper about it, make subtle gestures about other things that are green and nod towards her outfit, but it's not going to flat out say, "Green, dude." The fire might mention it, but its light is so strongly colored, that it isn't going to hit us over the head with green, either.

I also wouldn't have expected such a strong boob highlight. The moon seems much higher.

[Fireflights]

armando - great crits, thank you. Her face IS really grey, too, but I kept on changing the color because I wasn't exactly sure what it would look like in moonlight - at first it was too purple, then too blue, then I tried assing regular skin tone back to it and I guess that just neutralized everything. :\

The position of the "moonlight" globe was actually just meant to be relative (no more space vertically on the canvas, heh) but I'll be sure to address the other issues you mentioned, thanks :D

Infinit - me too, heh. We'll see! ;)

dogfood - you're right about the green, heh. I'll fix that. And the boob highlight I did go overboard on. I'm a sucker for sharp highlights and contrast, I can't easily tell myself "no". :P

The moon was meant to be higher, too - its position now is just relative. I couldn't put it any higher on the canvas I had, as there was no more space above her head. Thanks for the crits, though!


I'm off to work on this a bit - I'll post my progress as it comes along.

[GraphiteGolem]

The painting's great, I'm just wondering about her face?

She looks a bit upset, slightly constipated perhaps?

[dogfood]

You know, I really didn't even think about the tiny moon holder you had on the canvas, heh heh... I was talking in relation to where the moonlight was hitting the rest of the figure.

Sorry about the confusion.

[JAG.]

indeed this has great potential. your rendering is coming along nicely so far, but make sure you have the proper base first. her facial anatomy could do with some tweaking. the sketches are excellent as well, i love the 'hungry' sketch.

the girl has a very nice display of textures: smooth shiny skin, soft hair, laminated clothing. very nice rendering and great use of lighting. keep posting, this has great potential. good work - JAG

[Fireflights]

dogfood - ah, okay. I'll tweak the lighting of her face a bit, then.

JAG - Thank you. :)