martylikestowrite
August 19th, 2006, 07:36 PM
Script writer looking for artist
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Hello, I'm not a professional writer or someone that can pay for art. O.k. now that some of you have left, I write dark scripts and would like to find someone willing to make them into a dark comic style...this is just a piece of one of my scripts. I'm just a family guy that writes for fun, so don't be too critical.
FANTOA LYSTERIA
EXT. (music How many hearts? by Travis) Camera shot of man standing on building then pans down to street) South American looking crowded town full of character
EXT (Camera walks to store and enters, Coffee shop)
INT. (Coffee shop is full of people and our main
character Fantoa Lystera (21 good character face) has to squeeze his way through and when turns, face to face body rubs up against a beautiful young girl (pretty with character) Coffee shop is noisy and erupts (sound) like cattle stampeding.
EXT. Everyone has exited the coffee shop and the camera quickly pans to the coffee shop window and inside on the floor is a bloody pool that has drag marks leading out towards the back of the shop.
INT. (Flashback to earlier in the morning)
FANTOA LYSTERIA (music I’m a wheel by Wilco) (lead in shot, a flash back of Fantoa happy looking at a poster in his room of Quadrophenia poster (The Who movie) puts on a nice black Johnny Cash dress shirt and a pair of damp Levi’s.
EXT. (Shot of front of Art style school)Adelfo and Delphina wait for him sitting on the steps of the church next to the ominous and dark school that Fantoa hates.
ADELPHO (19 friend of FANTOA)
Your late
FANTOA
(coffee shop) (FANTOA looks distressed as he (camera shot to his finger in the bullet hole on the front of his scooter)
someone was shot at Estospresso and I
DELPHINA (16 dresses like a S L U T) (interrupts FANTOA)
I didn’t hear about that (shot to her face that is sour and looks like someone that doesn’t care)
FANTOA
God your such a stupid b i t c h! Why do you hang around with her?
ADELPHO
My father thinks she’s a W H O R E (goofy expression of sex) so, it make me feel special
Another Script
Mister Will Graham
So where are we headed?
Fartin Mowler
Downtown my friend
The two detectives end up in a Queen St West Apartment building Lobby. A young lady is heading out the door as the detectives are entering
Fartin Mowler
Stop her
A young that Fartin Mowler recognizes even though she tries to keep her head down.
Daphne
You like what you see detective?
Lifts up her shirt
Fartin Mowler
Can I have some Syrup with those pancakes?
Mister Will Graham coughs as he tries to hold back laughter
Daphne tries to struggle her wrist out of Mister Will Grahams Grasp
Fartin Mowler
Bring her up
The two detectives enter the room with Daphne who is holding her nose
Daphne
What’s that smell?
Mister Will Graham
Decomp…the smell of death (pauses and then turns around upset) you dirty
Daphne (laughs and then lights a cigarette)
So who is it?
Fartin Mowler bends down and searches pocket to find I.D.
I could only find this Porn King Dong Video credit card with the name Animadverto
Mister Will Graham
Looks well used, probably an alias
Fartin Mowler
Yes it does, the magnetic material when you swipe is almost gone
Daphne
Can you pull his pants up? That’s disgusting
Fartin Mowler
What you’re telling me you haven’t seen that wiener before?
Mister Will Graham pulls out a giant Dong in a dresser drawer next too the dead body.
Mister Will Graham
I’m sure this was used more than a few times
Fartin Mowler
What makes you think so?
Mister Will Graham
If you look close you can see brown ring lines that go up the Dong (smiles) it’s like a tree
Daphne (looks bored as she puts another smoke in her mouth)
I don’t get it
Fartin Mowler
I know you killed him
Daphne
Fuck you copper
Daphne pulls her had loose and runs towards the door only to be shot by Mister Will Graham
Back in the Holster Mister Will Graham slowly slides his gun in, but not before he kisses the hot steel and say’s a few words
Mister Will Graham
I don’t like to do stuff like that it bothers me. (Paces the floor and lightly kicks the body).
Fartin Mowler
I know (Fartin notices something about Daphne’s shirt) can you pull up her shirt again?
Mister Will Graham
Why? there not very impressive, I mean I’m sure some guy’s might find that attractive
Fartin Mowler
No look there is another t-shirt under that black one she is wearing
Mister Will Graham
Holy shit you’re right (reads the logo on the t-shirt) Porn King Dong and look she has a pin that say’s “employee of the month” still stuck to it
Fartin Mowler
Well Will are job is done here
Mister Will Graham
Should I put her shirt down chief?
Fartin Mowler
Sure and take a few pictures for later
Mister Will Graham (gives a look of a job well done and high fives Fartin)
Will do
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Hello, I'm not a professional writer or someone that can pay for art. O.k. now that some of you have left, I write dark scripts and would like to find someone willing to make them into a dark comic style...this is just a piece of one of my scripts. I'm just a family guy that writes for fun, so don't be too critical.
FANTOA LYSTERIA
EXT. (music How many hearts? by Travis) Camera shot of man standing on building then pans down to street) South American looking crowded town full of character
EXT (Camera walks to store and enters, Coffee shop)
INT. (Coffee shop is full of people and our main
character Fantoa Lystera (21 good character face) has to squeeze his way through and when turns, face to face body rubs up against a beautiful young girl (pretty with character) Coffee shop is noisy and erupts (sound) like cattle stampeding.
EXT. Everyone has exited the coffee shop and the camera quickly pans to the coffee shop window and inside on the floor is a bloody pool that has drag marks leading out towards the back of the shop.
INT. (Flashback to earlier in the morning)
FANTOA LYSTERIA (music I’m a wheel by Wilco) (lead in shot, a flash back of Fantoa happy looking at a poster in his room of Quadrophenia poster (The Who movie) puts on a nice black Johnny Cash dress shirt and a pair of damp Levi’s.
EXT. (Shot of front of Art style school)Adelfo and Delphina wait for him sitting on the steps of the church next to the ominous and dark school that Fantoa hates.
ADELPHO (19 friend of FANTOA)
Your late
FANTOA
(coffee shop) (FANTOA looks distressed as he (camera shot to his finger in the bullet hole on the front of his scooter)
someone was shot at Estospresso and I
DELPHINA (16 dresses like a S L U T) (interrupts FANTOA)
I didn’t hear about that (shot to her face that is sour and looks like someone that doesn’t care)
FANTOA
God your such a stupid b i t c h! Why do you hang around with her?
ADELPHO
My father thinks she’s a W H O R E (goofy expression of sex) so, it make me feel special
Another Script
Mister Will Graham
So where are we headed?
Fartin Mowler
Downtown my friend
The two detectives end up in a Queen St West Apartment building Lobby. A young lady is heading out the door as the detectives are entering
Fartin Mowler
Stop her
A young that Fartin Mowler recognizes even though she tries to keep her head down.
Daphne
You like what you see detective?
Lifts up her shirt
Fartin Mowler
Can I have some Syrup with those pancakes?
Mister Will Graham coughs as he tries to hold back laughter
Daphne tries to struggle her wrist out of Mister Will Grahams Grasp
Fartin Mowler
Bring her up
The two detectives enter the room with Daphne who is holding her nose
Daphne
What’s that smell?
Mister Will Graham
Decomp…the smell of death (pauses and then turns around upset) you dirty
Daphne (laughs and then lights a cigarette)
So who is it?
Fartin Mowler bends down and searches pocket to find I.D.
I could only find this Porn King Dong Video credit card with the name Animadverto
Mister Will Graham
Looks well used, probably an alias
Fartin Mowler
Yes it does, the magnetic material when you swipe is almost gone
Daphne
Can you pull his pants up? That’s disgusting
Fartin Mowler
What you’re telling me you haven’t seen that wiener before?
Mister Will Graham pulls out a giant Dong in a dresser drawer next too the dead body.
Mister Will Graham
I’m sure this was used more than a few times
Fartin Mowler
What makes you think so?
Mister Will Graham
If you look close you can see brown ring lines that go up the Dong (smiles) it’s like a tree
Daphne (looks bored as she puts another smoke in her mouth)
I don’t get it
Fartin Mowler
I know you killed him
Daphne
Fuck you copper
Daphne pulls her had loose and runs towards the door only to be shot by Mister Will Graham
Back in the Holster Mister Will Graham slowly slides his gun in, but not before he kisses the hot steel and say’s a few words
Mister Will Graham
I don’t like to do stuff like that it bothers me. (Paces the floor and lightly kicks the body).
Fartin Mowler
I know (Fartin notices something about Daphne’s shirt) can you pull up her shirt again?
Mister Will Graham
Why? there not very impressive, I mean I’m sure some guy’s might find that attractive
Fartin Mowler
No look there is another t-shirt under that black one she is wearing
Mister Will Graham
Holy shit you’re right (reads the logo on the t-shirt) Porn King Dong and look she has a pin that say’s “employee of the month” still stuck to it
Fartin Mowler
Well Will are job is done here
Mister Will Graham
Should I put her shirt down chief?
Fartin Mowler
Sure and take a few pictures for later
Mister Will Graham (gives a look of a job well done and high fives Fartin)
Will do