Family Matters

[Lazy]

Hey everybody i need some help.
I have started on a new picture for my portfolio that i will set up eventually, in contrast to my latest piece "droids over board" i to do wanted something dark and sick.

So here is the sketch:

http://img308.imageshack.us/img308/29/familymattertt5.jpg

It depicts the finding of a young woman who have her two parents heads on her arm and one baby sister pushed against the wall. There will be a big bloodstain on the wall behind because she is getting shot by the cops that find her, which i will tell in a small story to accompany it.

Can anyone find any anatomical problems or just any suggestions, i appreciate anything, have in mind that the faces are stylized to a certain limit, not that that is something to blame anatomical wrongdoings on.

[Moai]

Disturbing picture! There are three things I want to point out. The dead dad's open mouth should probably be more of a smooth oval shape, instead of coming out to points on either side like that. Her hand closest to us, the one holding her mom's head, looks fairly awkward. There's some wacky anatomy going on there. The fingers don't look like they're facing the right direction. Looking at yourself in the mirror when drawing these things would be helpful. Another hand issue, the little sister's left hand also doesn't look quite right, particularly the ring finger. I know these things are very difficult to draw, and you drew them probably at least as well as I would have.
On a positive note, I think her face is pretty well done. She's freaking me out, so I think you accomplished what you were going for in that regard.

[Lazy]

Moai: Thank you very much for your opinion.

I agree on her dads head, im thinking of re-drawing it completely.
But to my defence i want to say that i used my hands as reference so the anatomy cant be too way of, maybe to thick/thin fingers at certain points, though the baby's hand looks a bit wonky, they are pointing alittle astray, i will tweak my sketch soon, thanks again!

Any more tips anyone? :)

[Lazy]

Im about to call it a wrap, any final crits?

http://img138.imageshack.us/img138/107/02familymattersso9.jpg

[Zynic]

I feel that the foreshortening on her right arm( our left ) isn't really working, to me her arm looks a bit oversized :-/
I'm not an expert in foreshortening, so I can't give you any useful tips, but I think there are loads of other people here that can.
Other than that, emotional picture, you've done well to capture her mentally unstable attitude :)
( she has her parents' heads on her arm, but she's still smiling )
Keep it up :)

[Lazy]

Hey thanks for the crits, for the arm i actually took a snapshot with my webcam of myself doing that pose and the arm came out like that, so i think im on the right path but it looks grwierd i aee, not an expert of foreshortening either but thanks for pointing it out, lets see if somebody else can say something about it.
Thanks i hope it comes through that's she's ill.

[bkdev]

the concept is nice, but Zynic is correct in the foreshortening ..

her right arm looks basically the same lenght as the left arm ... thus giving the illusion that the right arm looks oversized. if you shorten the arm and show more of the top part of the fingers (also make the hand bigger than the other one) , it would give the illusion of foreshortening. (hope I explained that right)

[Lazy]

Thanks for your comment bkdev.
Will fix it soon, appreciate all help.