-Update 2- (Inked) Female character in progress - underlying form sketch

[Phait]

http://art.phaitaccompli.com/prog/prog1-b.jpg

I think the thighs are too thick, the arms a bit thick too. I didn't think the face would turn out too well, but I like the result. Hair is something I need to work on.

Some of the ink got smudged cause I was shifting a ruler around way too quickly. The belt and the stuff at the top of the boots could be straighter/cleaner.. Yeah I had that left hand semi-hidden cause I didn't feel like drawing it :P

http://art.phaitaccompli.com/prog/prog1-a.jpg

Reference
http://art.phaitaccompli.com/prog/prog1-ref.jpg

-Updated pic-
Fixed a few things, got more of the contour done, think the left thigh needs work, abdomen longer yet - hips need to be more apparent..

Not certain what she'll be yet. Breasts will need work, thinking of bringing left leg in more.

- right breast a bit flat?
- left arm bit more thick

[coriat]

hiya, my attempt at a useful crit...
well, it looks nice sofar... ;)
well, you mentioned the hips, it's not that they aren't long enough, the problem is the angle which they are on:
the hips are to level with the horizon, as you can see in the reference, her right (our left) leg is carrying all her weight...so the hips need to be more at an angle (our left side should be higher...see the ref.).
also, you copied the legs in the way they stand, but her hips and her torso dont fit...making the pose look awkward on paper.

So fix these things and kick in with the shading, i'd love to see it finished! :chug:


Ps, if you can, pick up a copy of Bridgman 's Complete guide to lifedrawing. It's an anatomy book (and a damn good one) but in one of the first chapters, he explains you can draw the body as 3 cubes... 1 for the torso, 1 for the head and 1 for the hips...this is really helpful if you want to draw figures...

Hope this helped.

[Phait]

Thanks Coriat.

More crits please!

[HosStyle]

I think the thighs are too thick, the arms a bit thick too. I didn't think the face would turn out too well, but I like the result. Hair is something I need to work on.

If you can see all these problems by yourself then you don't need a crit...

Fix all of that stuff first, since all those areas basically take up the entire image, and then repost...

Why would you post something up thats mediocre by your own standards and ask for crits before working out the piece to the point that you don't see the flaws??

[stutte]

Originally posted by HosStyle


If you can see all these problems by yourself then you don't need a crit...

Fix all of that stuff first, since all those areas basically take up the entire image, and then repost...

Why would you post something up thats mediocre by your own standards and ask for crits before working out the piece to the point that you don't see the flaws??

very good point HosStyle.

[gorilla777]

the piece is a good start...but the problem is anatomy. before you even start to ink you need to have believable proportions. i took the liberty of correcting the proportions for you in a similar pose. took me about 2 minutes and its very rough but you can see the difference in proportions from your original sketch. also, get the line of action in there to make your characters more dynamic:

http://home.attbi.com/~ks55/pictures/fix.jpg

[Phait]

Thanks for the pointers guys - thanks for the time getting that better visualized gorilla :)