WIP comic strip 3+4

[JERI]

This is my local library. No kidding.
http://img100.imageshack.us/img100/5240/comic200639cg.jpg

There's an "orphan" in this strip: "yeah" in the second bubble. Since "yeah" here is a sentence by itself, I figured it should be okay to leave it as is.
http://img504.imageshack.us/img504/8844/comic200641hk.jpg

As always, any crits you have is greatly appreciated.

[Bounty hunter]

this is a brilliant strip........... it shows creativity and i must admit its was hillarious to read. i like the way u have givin it a humerous side aswell as a boring side aswell

[Keenox]

Hahaha! :teeth: Very funny, but I can't see the connection between the first strip and the second one. You maybe should add some color. Do you use fiber pens or photoshop? :teeth:

[JERI]

Bounty Hunter - Ta.
Keenox - Ta. They're two separate strips. I use an ink pen, then take a picture of the image.

[noiion]

That's pretty funny, Jeri. On the first one I would prefer to be in the library because the wife wouldn't nag me there. On the second one, I thought it was going to be really painful until I reallized there is a mattress under the feet, so I guess he would be hurt so bad. It took me awhile to fiure out that they're doing that simulated mountain climbing deal though. Keep it up.

[CCThrom]

Heh - very good!

I have a few really small nitpicks if you want 'em...

"yeah" is good by itself, it's a complete thought and could even potentially occupy it's own balloon, no problem there. Orphan words are mostly a problem after a text block. If the word is a complete thought (like "wow" or "yikes"), it's legit to set it apart like that.

in the first one, 4th panel where the guy and the kid are walking out the door... looks like the kid is sporting a serious erection

2nd strip 2nd panel, "maybe" should be 2 words in this sentence

the only other thing that bugs me on the second strip, is I'm getting confused between the black rope and the black stripes on the guy's shirt. at first I thought the rope was wrapped around his waist. might want to make those stripes not solid.

But really, nice work... good pacing... nice understatement. I don't like when comics get too polished.

[voraz]

Very nice as usual. Especially the second one.

[JERI]

noiion - Actually, it's absolutely horrible to fall from that height, even if you were to land on those pads :). Feels like your internal organs are rolling around inside your body.

CCThrom - Oh yeah, I see the erection now, don't think people are gonna notice that though. Will be fixing the maybe. You got a point about the straps. I'll see if making it white helps.

voraz - Ta.

Thanks for the input dudes.