yarrrr

[Osmus]

i think its done! it's for practice. if you have any hardcore crits, don't hold back!
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v18/osmus/pirateillobig.jpg

[-db-]

You did give up on it ??
bad bad :(
it could be a very good piece..
Cause I still think it look like a Hand Doll...finger dummy.
and still as empty around those characters...

[Blaise]

I think there are problems with the composition. The guys raising the flag in the background are competing with your foreground characters in two ways: by being placed in the center of the composition and then framed with the foreground elements, and by being of equal value with the foreground.

Without changing the basic compostion, I would suggest at least lightening the flag raisers to give a sense of some depth and seperate the foreground and background.

Just my 2 cents.

[vigostar]

yeah, I agree with wit Baise's comment about the character holding up the flag competing with your forground character.. I think if you pushed it further back in that spot kinda below the moon where you have that open space it would look alot better and give your image more depth. I would also put some more of that broken wood behind the skeleton character a bit blurred out to give it a bit of middle ground and I would take out that piece of wood thats directly under the decaputated head. I think its too close to it and its throwing the scale of the image off.. You have some really nice things going on here... I like the BG and what you did with the sky... the dead man head looks pretty good although I think it should be a bit larger.. The wood looks great as a whole but, I think you need to scatter them around more or like I said just add some more.. I think you have the making of a good painting here.. just keep at it.. dont give up...

[Osmus]

thanks for your input. i think i solved some of the problems mentioned.
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v18/osmus/63387b5e.jpg

[JKarwin54]

hmm, tsk tisk, using the pose of a famous piece of art in your own piece for a different conspet. Interesting but I can't say it works.
Great work on the wood texture and overall feeling in this pic though; nice job.

[Simonl]

I think you need to work on the composition a bit more. The foreground zombie, who should be the focal point of the piece, just seems to blend into the background. I'd move the foreground elements up so that they are silhouetted against the sky to rectify this. You've also invested more detail in the woodpile than in the zombie. Unless the woodpile is the focus of the piece, you might want to rework that. The horizon is also slap bang in the middle, which tends to divide the piece.

[Vulgar`]

That moon looks snuffed, fix that.

[Osmus]

again thanks for the input, this should be moved to the WIP thread!
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v18/osmus/456cb451.jpg

[nonie]

More texture and detail on the foreground guy! He's still not the first thing I look at, but it's getting better with each rework - but if you're going to keep him in that corner, you need to at least break up the rectangle of dark that he's lost in. And lighten the flag-raisers even more. They're still showing up as the center of interest because it's the highest-contrast part of the picture - either lightening them more and/or blurring them a bit will help. Throw some more light from the moon on the foreground figure to help separate him from the background. And I'd suggest expanding your canvas so that he's not smushed in the corner, it's just an awful place for him.

Keep working on it - it's getting better each time!