...fight! - Wip

[Tayama]

Yes, i know, i have some dragons to finish...but i'm busy with an entry for a contest. The contest's subject is: 'Cyborg'.

I'm not really happit with the girl [she's the 'cyborg', jhen she doesn't really look like a cyborg, but when i say it's a cyborg, it is :p ]. BUT, i am happy with the boy ^^'.

Yes, i used a ref. for the girl, and with that ref i made the whole drawing. I only..ehm, don't know wich artist made the ref i used. :\ Maybe anyone else?

http://members.lycos.nl/tayama/art/fight.jpg

And remember, i'm just a 15 years young boy from Holland :o

Oh, and this will be my first drawing with a BACKGROUND!, worship me! :p

[AfroLaxMan]

This looks promising, I like the style you have.
I would suggest to take a look at the male's hands and wrists. Take a look at some reference photos just to get it a little tighter. HIs hands don't quite fit the rest of the style you have.
Also, like me, you have a tendency to make the female look a bit masculine, maybe just soften up her curves a bit. I have always had a tough time drawing females and making them look tough and buff while still retaing the femine qualities.

can't wait to see the rest.

[Erik]

Good stuff!

The girl should be more girly maybe - some girl attributes. Really like the clothings and the action is all there allthough viewed from the side.

Curious about the background...

The guy has some issues with his hips i think even if he's in a more comic-related style.

[ And drop that 'have mercy i'm 15' stuff - your drawing is good enough to do without it ;-) ]

About the chica: the right (our left) breast is drawn to the side of the chest. If you remove the line on the chest and continue the line of the bresat more it will look more natural i think.

[Tayama]

Originally posted by AfroLaxMan
This looks promising, I like the style you have.
I would suggest to take a look at the male's hands and wrists. Take a look at some reference photos just to get it a little tighter. HIs hands don't quite fit the rest of the style you have.
Also, like me, you have a tendency to make the female look a bit masculine, maybe just soften up her curves a bit. I have always had a tough time drawing females and making them look tough and buff while still retaing the femine qualities.

can't wait to see the rest.

Yeah, i know, i'm not a fan of making hands :o
And, hehe, i'm not a fan of making girls too :p Males are a lot easier to make.

But thnx :)

Originally posted by Erik
Good stuff!
- Thnx.

The girl should be more girly maybe - some girl attributes. Really like the clothings and the action is all there allthough viewed from the side.
- Yeah, i know, she isn't very feminine [Of hoe je dat schrijft], But remember, she is half-robot-thing. So she don't have to be nice-looking. :P

Curious about the background...
- Me too. I've never made a background before. I've started already, but i only have one tree finished, and already hate it :o.

The guy has some issues with his hips i think even if he's in a more comic-related style.
- Ehm...what's wrong with it then?


[ And drop that 'have mercy i'm 15' stuff - your drawing is good enough to do without it ;-) ]
- Do you think?
I'm no so sure, i'm thinking some people are going to think 'That guy is drawing like a kid...'
ANd i don't want that man [Yeah, i know i'm a kid...but..ah.]

About the chica: the right (our left) breast is drawn to the side of the chest. If you remove the line on the chest and continue the line of the bresat more it will look more natural i think.
-Ok, dit snap ik niet, vertaal even in het nederlands k?

[Erik]

Dutch explanation of previous post since it was obscure:

<language="dutch">
Ok, de linker borst lijkt aan de zijkant te zitten omdat de lijn die midden door de borst loopt ver doorloopt. Het zou mooier kunnen zijn als je of die lijn korter maakt, of juist de ronding van de linker borst doorzet zodat de ronding de lijn die er nu is vervangt.
</language>

i did a quick line over to show what i meant:
http://www.xs4all.nl/~erikedf/art/wip/tayama.jpg

But it's quick so maybe not really clear/good.

[Gray]

Just something I noticed:

The blade on the girls left arm doesn't look very handy to wield. Pehaps you could extend the blade to her lower arm or at least keep it in the same direction. Now it looks like it's hanging loosely which means very difficult to do damage with. And I suppose that's where it's for.

Would like to see the progress of this.
Cheers