Rhino Man

[Oolong Boartusker]

Long time lurker, first time poster. There is tons of great stuff on this message board.

I'm working on some things which I intend to use in a new portfolio book, so i want to make sure all my pic's are top notch. Any suggestions, critiques, etc. would be very helpful :)

Thanks!

http://www.cbctx.com/images/tal/rhino_web.jpg

[R_M]

welcome oolong interesting concept you have here,
I like the face paint on the face, and the way the ribcage shows.
if I had to critique I would say that the lighting is off. right now the yellow highlight is more of an outline, it shouldn't be on any of the rhinos right edges. Don't know if it makes any sense, but take the right arm, the left side should have the light, while the right side shouldn't, my 2 cents anyway.
hope it was of help, post more stuff!

[MindCandyMan]

Yeah the edges of the highlight are a little hard to read. Also the light would be passing through the ear a bit as well. I don't know if that makes sense the way I put it...you know how when you are outside the light shines on your ears and they look red cause the light is reflecting off of the blood inside (I think that's what causes it)...at any rate that would happen here as well. A defined cast shadow in the front of the rhino guy would go a long way as well. Cool concept with the rhino guy he looks cool. His hip, leg, and foot areas look a little off to me. His foot doesn't seem to be interacting with the ground...it may be the outline down there throwing me off though. This is a great concept keep reworking it man!

[Oolong Boartusker]

I darkened the glowing outline on his right side, but I have yet to go back and rework his leg/foot and the ear. Thanks for the input! :)http://www.cbctx.com/images/tal/rhino2_web.jpg

[Oolong Boartusker]

Added some texture, worked on his ear, and making it seem like he is actually standing on something instead of floating on the floor.

I think I want some glowing runes or letters on the inside of the doorway next.

http://www.cbctx.com/images/tal/rhino3_web.jpg

[MindCandyMan]

Much Much better down by the bottom of the foot...good job. The only other problems I see are the outline of the sunshine around his hand and below his waist...the outline you have laid down there is really sharp and clean and it flattens out the form a lot. Blend the yellow light more around the form like it's made up of more volume. As of now it makes it look just like a yellow outline. Let it bleed further forward on the skin...(if that made sense). Especially around the fist/finger area...the light would bleed between the fingers more. Same thing with the post in the back...looks a little cut out. Also one other thing. the pouches that are wrapped around his limbs look really flat...they don't have any volume to them.

You fix those things and this image will be tip top. I love the stockiness of the rhino and how you made him real short...looks awesome. Great job man...glad to see you are still working it out too...awesome.

[MindCandyMan]

Just noticed all the texture on the wall...great great addition...awesome

[Oolong Boartusker]

Thanks for all the tips, appreciate greatly :D!

http://www.cbctx.com/images/tal/rhino4_web.jpg