Character Sketch - Hero Shot

[ANARKY]

I did this sketch of the Protagonist of a story I have in mind and would like some feedback on it.

Please give me your thoughts on the Perspective, the anatomy, the angle etc.

http://img383.imageshack.us/img383/6127/aj13ce.jpg

I hope to finish this off as a full colour image sometime soon.


Cheers

[madster]

Nice clothes.

Her right thigh is too fat in proportion to the rest of the body.
Her browbone is almost neanderthal scary, you've emphasized it so much. Combined with the wide, man-like jaw you've given her, she is not so attractive, but does look "strong."

The left arm is very out of synch with the rest of this woman. It looks like a child's arm with the skin flayed off for a muscular study. You have not provided any body fat with those lean, sinewy muscles, throwing it out of whack. The rest of this gal has breasts, hips, and an overly fat right thigh. For an arm to be that muscular, the rest of the body would, too.

The neck and scapula also show lines and values giving this "lean muscle" look, but those can be visually attributed to age, too much sun, etc., but the arm needs to be "fleshy" to the same amount as the legs and upper torso.

~M

[ANARKY]

Cheers.

Hmm, yup, your right, the right thigh is too thick.
I can have a look at the face, perhaps its a little too defined!
Darn it, look at that arm, Your right again, its too small. Im comparing it to her right hand which is way bigger. I shall have to sort that out.

I am going for defined though. Sorta female Bruce Lee or Sarah Conner from T2. But with bigger tits! :angel: :bashful:

Thanks again!

[madster]

Sorta defined is one thing. You make her as lean as Sarah Connor, forget the tits, you will have to whittle down the entire rest of her to reduce overall body fat for that kind of lean...

I think you will be better off just fattening up her arm instead...she's cute enough now, in a manly-faced sorta way.

~M

[SimoSK8]

I must disagree on the thigh size.. Depending on what your looking for that is, but looking at the woman's anatomy at a whole(not including right arm) the thighs go well with the scrawny figure. the arm is quite out of place tho.. I'd check the anatomy on the muscles and the elbow is way too thin. I must admit her torso is well done tho, so good job on that. I'd like to see it in colour:)

[madster]

That's nice, SimoSK8, but when even the artist themselves see and agree with the discrepancies pointed out...Well, perhaps your general approval is a bit misplaced, and more appoaching the level of an ass-pat, than an informed opinion...

~M

[dogfood]

She seems to get scrunched as you go down. It's like you so wanted to show those sexy knees that you sacrificed proper anatomy to do so. Now, I admit that there's something fascinating about the image, but that's a tough angle, even tougher without reference.

I want DSillustration to see this. Dan's always commenting that he has trouble finding a way into women's pants...

[SimoSK8]

What's with the hostility.. how bout you give your opinions to the artist and i'll give mine..

[JERI]

No one else thinks the left shoulder needs to be more developed? That's the first thing that stood out to me - she's got a bulging left tricep for a thin arm like that. I'd say make that left shoulder bigger.

[Liquidspider]

No one thinks the right breast looks a bit low? I like this piece tho.. fix the mistakes mentioned and it should greatly improve

[ANARKY]

Hi Guys

Thanks for the Feedback. I have made some changes, although not all the ones mentioned up to present. But they can be added in.

One point I want to say right now before we go any further.
Lets have no hostility in this thread please. SimoSK8 was only giving his opinion madster, and its as valid as yours or anyones.

OK, heres the updates version. The changes are minimal as the crits where all about details and little things, so I will put the two images together for you to compare!
I reduced the juttyness of the jaw, lessened the definition on the arm, and widened it too. And the right leg is slightly thinner.
New First.
http://img114.imageshack.us/img114/8710/aj12s3ai.jpghttp://img383.imageshack.us/img383/6127/aj13ce.jpg

Any thoughts?