need c&c for application work! Heeelp!

[Milho]

Hi,
I need your help. I have this weekend to finish the work for a application at a media-art-school.

Would like to listen to your comment (if it helps! Please do NOT demotivate me or I'll shoot myself :p )

The topic of the work is transit. I try to do some concepts /and a storyboard for a animation short.



Quick story overview: A guy "transit-bob" pushes a huge package around and wants to go through an area (/bridge) which is watched by a big unfriendly fellow.

Here the first concept page of bob:
http://www.milho.de/portfolio/transit_bob/bob_expressions_1.jpg

I think i'll make the lines stronger when I satisfied with it.

[Milho]

Next one, the model sheet of bob:
http://www.milho.de/portfolio/transit_bob/bob_modelsheet_1.jpg

[Ian Mack]

Okay, I think one of the hands on your story sheet are a little weak. Something you could do to fix it is go back and draw the underlying structure. A palm shape and 3 balls each for each knuckle on the fingers etc. The watch too, looks flat.

Be careful that the hands line up in your turnaround too.

I like the expressions on the faces for the most part, but for the line around the cheek, you should treat it like it's part of a bulge there, and you're drawing the underside of it(that's the line). Squish your cheeks up and you'll know what I'm talking about. lol :p

uhmm...his teeth in the bottom left don't look right, migth be better to do the horizontal line for teeth.

Lookin' good so far ! As I said, nice expression. Just remember structure and use your own face whereever possible.

What school ?

[Milho]

Thanks for the hints. I've redone some stuff.

It's all gone today. Hope they like the expressions as well. :rolleyes:

It's a school for audiovisual media art in cologne.