Argh and life

[Nordstrand, T]

Hi all,

first work-in-progress post from me, if any of you would be so kind as to tell me what's wrong so far...

I've lost contact with the image a little, especially colour wise. I'm trying to be selective as to where I put contrast, to make it easy to look at. Is there something that disturbs you?

Somebody told me to make the cavern walls yellower, and that sounds logic, but as the same time I'm trying to protect the focus on the "family". If you had only 3 minutes to fix this, what would you do?

Here it is:

http://mysite.freeserve.com/tnordst/temp/TN-Rent-a-Tent-Work8-PS.jpg

Thanks,

[Fozzybar]

Not in 3 minutes, but maybe in 5...

I would just copy the fading from black to blue in the upper right corner to the upper left corner. So there would appear a "shine" around the family. Try to boost the contrast in the family parts, especially the woman could have darker parts...

[Oblio]

I would work the arm of the big guy - looks broken, curious sized... it's something wrong there. It's the first thing that i've noticed.
Also the rocks, (the mountain) has little depth - at the merge of the mountain with the sky seems flat. I didn't understood what is there (the sky was as blue as the soldiers and... it's a little messy i think.)
Can you fix those in 3 min? :P

Oblio
P.S. - How are your lessons doing? I envy you! :)
Best of luck!

[Nordstrand, T]

I finished it! Wu-huu :D
Please, take a look at it's thread here! (http://www.conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?s=&threadid=517)

Fozzybar: I've increased contrast around the family, you were right about that. I've also sharpened that area considerably. Hopefully it's easier to read now, thanks!

Ob: Thanks Ob, hope I've fixed the arm enough, though I'm relying on it composition-wise. I messed up bad in the background too... this is supposed to be the inside of a small cave, it shouldn't have those blue/green tones. I believe I made it clearer in the finished piece. My lessons are doing fine, and I've signed up for three life-drawing courses this semester.. fun fun fun! :D Now have a look at the finished one and tell me what you think will ya? :)