first freelance comic strip

[dajovion]

I just finished my first freelance comic strip. I haven't drawn a comic strip in YEARS so I wanted to get some criticism from you all out there.
For starters, I only had 2 days to get this done. I finished it in 7 hours from start to finish(drafts, approvals, etc). The client wanted something very simple with politically correct characters. They gave me the script so I had no control over that. The comic is going to be on a flyer given out at some trade show called ARON. What do you all think? Oh, and the comic reads in vertical panels, not horizontal. (they wanted it that way)
http://www.ry-guy.com/test/images/nurse.jpg
http://www.ry-guy.com/test/images/scrubavailcomic.jpg

[Juice5942]

Well personally I think the script is lame, were I a hospital I probably wouldn't base my purchase on the lame lines they gave you to use.

The cartooning, on the hand, is pretty good. I think you worked pretty well with what they made available to you. I guess that's the life of a freelance artist, huh? :D

[dajovion]

Yeah, it was a real rush job. I had to ink the thing in an airport while I waited for a connecting flight. Ha. Thanks for the compliments. I wish I had more time on it.

[LC3]

Well I think it's great for a rush job. The only thing bugging me are some of the lines I wish you used a straight edge on. I like the clean style! Congrats on the gig.

[dajovion]

Yeah, good point. I should have used a straight edge. I didn't have anything on me at the time though. Thanks for the compliments.