Trying something just a little different (WIP)

[Mold-n-Meat]

Greetings CA. I've been pretty much lurking for the past few weeks and thought it long time over due that I post something. Where better to start than to hide in here and ask for help? :3

The situation? I've been drawing/illustrating for the past few years and recently got tired with my one point perspective, pinup-like, boring poses. I'd been recently commissioned to do a stylized portrait (comic/manga) of a young woman who has a deep love for Japanese comics. Not a problem. I've done portraits and manga styled stuff before... However, when setting the scene it all went TERRIBLY WRONG. :nohope:

I'm attempting to have her sitting in an extreme foreshortened view, sitting with her leg dangling off a circular ledge/balcony. The other would be tucked underneath her. Lastly of the "important" parts - the almost cliché black wings sprouting from her back.

As of right now it's at the sketch and preparing transfer stage. I can't move the image to the final paper for inking and color until I get some of these perspective and anatomy issues worked out. "IT LOOKS SO WRONG IT MAKES ME WANT TO CRY!" *whimper*

http://www.pegasus.rutgers.edu/~katoya/ca/laura(0).jpg

I can see problems with both feet, and her arm... I just am not sure how to fix it. Maybe the ledge is completely off as well. I'm not exactly a regular at drawing more "healthy" figured females either. I just thought I'd turn to all of you.
Thanks for taking a look :3
- Kabi

[madster]

Have you tried placing a 3-point perspective grid over this? It will definitely tell you if the ledge is working, as well as help you with the body foreshortenening.

[Danilo]

You can extend canavas a bit.

[afterthought]

agreed, extend the canvas.
put in vanishing points
you can always crop in later.
using that grid will help a lot before jus trying to do it out of your head.
i jus whipped this paint over up really quick in ps.
i changed the pose a little.
i think the foot in the water is really distracting so i got rid of it.
it's really weird for her to sit that way.
circulation cut off?!

http://i13.photobucket.com/albums/a253/tief/corections.jpg

[Mold-n-Meat]

Thanks all for your help so far… To bad I can’t start working on it again right now *laughs*
The image shown is of the cropped canvas. I tend to work large and before uploading anywhere I size down and then cut out most of the white space…border… area… The grid method used was the one where you draw a box around the area, put equally spaced lines on each end, and then connect. (forgets the real name >.>) I tend to have a particular problem with curves in perspective though. :3
In any case, I’ll pop a grid over it again and size down the spaces in-between to see if it can be a little more accurate…’

Afterthought – Yes it would be weird of her to sit that way … but she’s not exactly planning on staying there for long. You can think of it as being on the edge of a bunk bed – balancing on one knee and the other leg extended towards the floor… and then hurlling your body forward to let gravity take its course. (difference here being that she’s got /wings/ and won’t go crashing into the pavement. Tra-la-le XD)

If I don’t give up against my deadline and start a new one, I’ll update later.
Thanks!

Fighting against the head and the eye…
- Kabi