dealthlok(roughs1 and 2)

[Grendel]

please give any crits you can ill need them..the second page has dialouge between the two before dude fires on Dlok. thanks for looking.



http://images.deviantart.com/large/indyart/freehand/deathlokthumbs-01.jpg


http://images.deviantart.com/large/indyart/scifi/deathlokroughspage2.jpg

[tyboogie]

yo grendel---you got some good stugff started here--i like th efirst one in partic, and the way your communicating to us sequentially. i feel like all your shots are varied close-ups--so i could use some breathing room. like maybe a wide angle establishing shot somewhere...? on the second if you take out the 2 middle panels of the faces i think it will astill read the samish and youll have more breathing room for text. post the finals!---ty