comics about "world of warcraft"

[17sec]

pencil work, colors and scenario by me :mouse:
begining of story about fantasy creatures from "world of warcraft"- actually the dead one and gnome

http://www.colors.lt/data/graphics/wow1/large.jpg

[Matt Smith]

I really like the colors you used, and the flow of the comic seems to work. some wierd anatomy issues are going on, like why are his toes so wierd looking in the first 2 boxes?

[Storyboard Dave]

A few thoughts...

In the explosion frame- why not take the explosion beyond the frame? Don't be constrained by it!

Why are the word balloons in the last frame tilted like that?

And in the second from last frame, why is he seemingly pointing at us??

Other than that...nicely done.

[17sec]

I really like the colors you used, and the flow of the comic seems to work. some wierd anatomy issues are going on, like why are his toes so wierd looking in the first 2 boxes?

Thank, Matt. Now, when u pointed "with finger", I realised that they are a bit different style than rest of picture

[17sec]

A few thoughts...
1) In the explosion frame- why not take the explosion beyond the frame? Don't be constrained by it!
2) Why are the word balloons in the last frame tilted like that?
And in the second from last frame, why is he seemingly pointing at us??
Other than that...nicely done.

I am really grateful for your detail critics, Dave.
1) u r totally right- next time I will try not to do such mistake
2) I was using tilting in all "frames", because I do have fobia of strict rectangles... anyway, yes, tilting should be more motivated.
3) eh, the gnome was confused so showed any random direction- actually to viewer, because no more people around- only dead one, gnome and spectator. Some kind of interactivity ^^:

[JERI]

Was the Engrish intended? It actually made the strip more amusing.

[Danilo]

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