WIP "coffee made me fly"

[apipe]

this piece for my girlfriend and all coffee lovers
as u see, just beginning......C&C are welcome.


http://yaser.online.tj.cn/UT/attach/2003/02/09/118300-nono1-embed.jpg:) :)

[apipe]

face colseup

http://yaser.online.tj.cn/UT/attach/2003/02/09/118298-nono1face-embed.jpg

[rimwalker]

That's really nice. Very soft and expressive. I really like the texture of her hair, great job there.

My single critique would be to maybe try bringing more detail out in the coffee cup to bring it a more forward in terms of attention. That way there's a litle more balance between the top and botom sections of the composition. But that's just my thought.

It's a great picture and you did a good job.

[apipe]

...thanks rimwalker

today i added some backgroud things on it..
and made the wings looked like water made..
could u give me more advices?

http://yaser.online.tj.cn/UT/attach/2003/02/23/124963-nono1-embed.jpg

[rimwalker]

Wow, just a couple of extra things can make a huge difference. I really enjoy the composition to it. The way the curtain, her right wing (left to us) and her gaze all run along the same diagonal-- straight out the window. That works really well.

I find myself bothered by the coffee cup again (sorry! :D ). This time I wonder what would happen if you aligned it with the same diganal as the the curtain and etc.? In other words, what would the image look like with the cup put back on her left (our right?)? This is just a suggestion, just a thought I had.

And the wings do look liquid. :) Once again, great job.

[Gray]

Great work.. Nice pose...

I only have the feeling her hair is not falling down naturally.. especially on her rightside of the head...

[Fisa]

i'd add some salmonish highlights to the rust colored lace trim on her shirt. it would add some interesting secondary detail.