my new artsite

[steffey]

hey everyone in this community...i just finished my site..hope you enjoy thanks... cristy steffey www.steffey.20m.com

[BlackKitty]

It's a nice clean, easy to navigate site. It says "art" with the design. Definitely some good tattoo art in the pen and ink section.

:)

[Form]

if your gonna use this as a promotional tool, you need to rethink it. i mean the title bar says ms site builder, lol, and you can tell. The whole site screams "I NEED A WEBPAGE QUICK!!"

Spend some time and think real seriously about the site if you want to use it to promote yourself.

You have a lot of typos on the first page... and some on others. Real unprofessional, fix these, or get someone else to do it if you dont pick those things up easily...

On the first page:

- Capitalisation on portfolio is incorrect...common mistake, but doesnlook professional, sorry.

-Born in the North carolina. Need to remove 'the' and capitalise Carolina

- interested in Arts -- bad grammar. "Interested in art" or "interested in The Arts"

- Experince should be experience

-the arts through trying mixed mediums, oils remove 'trying' and replace it with 'by diversifying' or 'by experimenting' or some such. Trying sounds demeaning to yourself.

-Inent should be intent

-envoke should be evoke

-imagiation should be imagination

see what I mean? One may not seem like a big deal, but when theres this many on the first page alone it begins to jump out, and dont look pretty.

In other news, the general sound of the blurb is kind of awkward:


"she furthered her artistic abilities through years of basic education in elementary and high school"


??? yeah, didnt we all??? I urge you to rewrite this properly or get someone to do it. You want people to see you in the best light!!!

The overall format needs a lot of work too....

Its a shame because your artwork is really nice and id like to see it well represented by a quality site...

i hope you dont mind me posting this here, i just feel its important to promote yourself the best you can....

im going to send you a pm check when you can...

[amjadshelly]

Get someone to write the page for you. Your art may be good, but English needs a lot of improvement.

Keep trying !