Please have a look, at my newest peice.

[Waser]

Please be as critical as you like, I will try and stop my ego from getting in the way :rolleyes: thank you for your time.

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v651/waser/energyrobot.jpg

[Cocofuppa]

Ok, its way too dark to start off with, which makes it impossible for me to work out what and where im staring at and also completely hides any linework done. It looks like a figure holding something flamey or something like that, if so I would add some light reflections onto the background, or make the background a lighter colour so that the black figure pops out a bit more.

2 cents

Peace

[Waser]

Thank you for your coment 'Cocofuppa'

In my origonal picture i was trying to have the back of the figure almost blend into the background and have his highlights give him form, but i supose this would make the rest of his figure hard to discern and would remove the pencil marks.

Please note that i am atempting to become a good concept artist and most concept art that i have seen (primarily from this site) their peices are done fast and with little attention to small (and often distracting details) and have very good use of colour, lighting, form and composition.

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v651/waser/energyrobot2.jpg

[thebluepuppy]

the swirly line things make it impossible to read and look very ametuer. lose the swirly lines. clean up the silhoette around the figure.lose the black sketchy outline around the ball. fix the hand. maybe add a glow to the ball. give him a slightly different local color then the ball. make the areas not getting light on him darker(pump the contrast up).

[Waser]

...fix the hand. maybe add a glow to the ball. give him a slightly different local color then the ball... .

Firstly i am not shure what you mean by these comments. Are you refering to the lack of fingers in his hand, because he is only ment to just have floating last digits of his fingers.

With changing his local colour are you refering to his actual colour (no light generated colour) because he is ment to be brown with the energy ball giving him yellow highlights... maybe i have not done this correctly. If you have any recomendations to what i could/should do, it would be a great help.

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v651/waser/glowrobot.jpg

Ps: please tell me if i am posting too many pictures, cos i will remove some earlier ones.

[thebluepuppy]

its getting there.still is sketchy. try using solid opaque brushstrokes instead of glazing. stroke economy is key. also tone down the green fog everywhere except near his face and the ball. its to distracting. also clean the image up more. the hand needs some serious modeling. also show more contour in the face. the shield thing looks off perspectivly. the ball light would cast a shadow on his neck from his head. it would look so much better if you cleaned up those SKETCHY LINES INSIDE THE PAINTING AND AROUND IT. ITS KILLING YOUR IMAGE!!!!
also i read a comment above about "fast concept art". you will get fast if you take your time. focus on getting it right. speed will come with age and practice.

[Waser]

I have replaced the pencil outline with a more solid (bad grammer) outline from my wacom, and i have re-adjusted the fingers a little. I am still not on your wavelength about his hand, their are onyl suposed to be fingers (no hand bit), maybe i have done his fingers incorectly... i dont know. As for his head i want it to be smooth and with little detail, would it look better with more detail?

Any how, hope you like and thanks again for your help.

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v651/waser/glowrobot2.jpg

[thebluepuppy]

this is a perfect example of the "150 rule". take a look at your first image. from what i understand you posted it with the understanding it was finished. now look at your last image. when you "think" your finished you usually have about a third more to do on it. it turned out nicely. if ca.org gave cookies instead of stripes. you earned your first cookie today.

[Waser]

I can realy see the differnce, i have learnt a lot by doing this.

... now to think of my next picture to render. :^^:

[thebluepuppy]

these forums are great arent they ;) . cant wait to see your next pic. keep us all posted

[talmir]

Nice, I looked at the first one and was a bit :nohope: about it, so I scrolled down and I abolutely <3 what youve done with it.

Keep up the good work.