Typography Concept

[leviward]

Hello everyone, I am a newcomer to the posting part of the forum, however I've spent many hours browsing through the work here and I must say I admire the work I see.

This is a mostly digital piece, aside from the background texture. It is the second version of a concept I have had in my head for quite a while but haven't quite been able to get it on screen, if you will.

I know that this piece clashes a bit with the other content posted on the site but I am really interested in getting some helpful critiques and comments.

http://www.deca3001.dxchosting.com/art/007.jpg

[Garam05]

Apparently, your link is dead.

Garam05

[leviward]

ah, my host is back up.
image is there now Garam05 :rendered:
sorry for the inconvenience

[ExeCute]

you don't see much typography on here..

im a sucker for stuff to do with romance, and especially when it's the depressing type. so i like it!

Looks like it's an upsidedown heart? if you could, i think you should push the shape further so it's more obvious. I like that one drippy line at the T, it's just right.

Maybe you'd let me or someone on the forum collaborate with your typography and turn it into an illustration or something more likely of these forums, like maybe i'd put the text on a character's tshirt, or impose it into a background for example

i dunno :)

[Hamsta]

Could you make it a teensy bit smaller, so that it fits on one screen? :smaller:
It's too compacted for comfortable reading, if you don't want it to be read make it even tighter, if you do want it to be read make it looser.
I agree with execute on the subject of making the shape more obvious, but not about intergrating it into illustration. I also like the drip :)

[rockstar4783]

i think it would look better if there was more line spacing, assuming you want it to be readable. the lines being so close together and some of the words blurry and some crisp makes me eyes hurt when i read it.

[rodrigogua]

i think it would look better if there was more line spacing, assuming you want it to be readable. the lines being so close together and some of the words blurry and some crisp makes me eyes hurt when i read it.

i guess it's kinda supposed to be all confusing and stuff, not really an enjoyable and easy-reading book you know, taking into consideration what the poem says...

[Ustabiaz]

I'm Loving it.

Don't change any of it, I just felt overwhelmed by the words as I was reading it while really liking the graphical aspect of it.

Hope to see more works like this.

[.:pitseleh:.]

I'm definitely feelin' this. Kinda reminds me of the typography of a Radiohead cover, only simpler. It also has that heartbreaking, cut-up flow to it, so when reading, it really feels like it's someone talking to you. Nice work. I wanna see more of these!