BLACKOUT pages 1-13 updated 7/05

[sabe2003]

***This is an update pages 1-13 finished again, and again and then redone!***
-- I re did everything and added 3 pages. Sure would like more feedback.......

[jetpack42]

cool dude, I'm really digging it, thanks for sharing.

[sabe2003]

Thanks, more to come....

[sabe2003]

HEy all,
I added page 9 and 10
and well, in the past month all I got is two more pages, but the story line is finally progressing. :)
C&c is always welcome and enjoyable :)

[vigostar]

wow, these are great.... So, this stuff is published??? Im going to try and start buying books from the artists here.. Let me know.. Your would be the first!

[sabe2003]

oh not published yet, but the time is coming to attemp shopping it around.
Thanks for the comment and support :)

[sabe2003]

Updated:
page eleven finally done! :zzz:

[Form]

yeah man thats wicked.

id buy it



only suggestion id offer is to spend some time planning your panel layouts. They kind of look like theyve all been slapped on the page a bit randomly. Think of the overall composition of panels on the page and so on. Theres a lot you could do with some overlapping elements and some tighter frame composition.

Have a look at some comic work you get inspired by and youll see what i mean cos im really no expert on it, just an observation.

WIcked story and ideas for each frame. Good luck with it all.

[sabe2003]

Form:
Thanks a lot for the comment, I'm happy you would buy it. The fact that you read it and took the time to give feedback is great! Thx
Layout will be and is always something I try think more about.

[SnowLeopard]

I really like it. Very cool. Just one thing however. The first page contains a grammatical error. Should say "What little signs of life are left get trampled...." Remove the "AND".

P.S. Hope it gets published soon! :)

[sabe2003]

Oh, yeah, that does sound better. The good thing about working with a writter is that I get to blame him for grammer errors LOL :wink:

[sabe2003]

I have finished 4 pages and re-scanned and re-photoshoped all the pages, thought I'd edit the old post and maybe get some new feedback. C&c anyone?

[aeoxo]

I would suggest you work on the action scenes...
it looks like his foot is hovering in front of the guys face...

I love the way the girl dissolved into leaves.


awesome

-R

[sabe2003]

Thx for the feedback!
Your right, I've been sketching in the ol blackbook to get some more movement in the action and to show more impact! I know what you mean about the foot, in future panels I'm gonna really push for contact and motion....