My GF in 2° Arabesque (ballet) - my first time here =)

[omnia]

Hello everyone it's my first post =)
It's very nice to be here in this community !
I'm from Rio de Janeiro, Brazil.
And this is my gf dancing ballet =)
It's not that wonderful draw but i gave it to her in her birthday. And she love it ! ehhehe ;-)
Sorry about my english !
Bye ! :^^:
http://img39.exs.cx/img39/7069/2003_0620Image0067-redef.jpg

[jetpack42]

could you make it smaller plz?

[omnia]

Yes sure !
=)
Critcs are welcome for all ! !!
=) BYE BYE
http://sp6.fotologs.net/?u=raposao&i=2004/10/26/1098764990.jpg&c=f

[LightBrownboy]

Welcome to the forums. I think this should be posted in the Life Drawing section, you might be better off getting help there.

Anyways, here's a few things I spotted, i took the liberty of doing a tracing:
First all the proportions are pretty good, but you have lost a lot of the 3 dimensional form...a lot of her body feels really flat with no depth to it.

1 and 2 point to the joints in her hand. You have flattened it out tremendously, look at your hand...ask your girlfriend to pose her hand again, see there is a gradual plane or ramp from the forearm to the wrist and hand. You have totally flattened it out making it look like the hand and forearm are fused.

3 and 4 try and show more perspective of the form as you have one arm coming towards us and one going away from us. Remember..the arm is a cylinder in space so foreshortening and perspective come into play greatly.

5 just trys to show the how the folds of the buttocks are affected by one leg coming out at the viewer and one staying stationary.

6 just shows the lengthening of the lower calf. This may be different to your girlfriends proportions but when I think of a ballerina...im thinking very long and elegant. This is where you as an artist take a few liberties in what you see and capture the essence of your subject.

http://img104.exs.cx/img104/8301/rework.jpg

Also, when you get a chance try playing around with values so we can see rolling of the form and see a distinct seperation of skin to her wardrobe.

This is a lot, sorry to blab so much but please, keep going with the drawings from life, this is meant to help you along the way. Take care and hope this helps.

-Patrick

[omnia]

WOW LightBrownboy ! THANKS A LOT MAN !
Thanks for the attention and the help !
i will try to get better in those topics !
Start practing now !
=)
thanks for all !

Bye ! :teeth: