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||STEBO||
September 15th, 2004, 03:11 AM
hi all!!!

here i am again with a new work. 8 pages of a story and here is the first:

http://digilander.libero.it/stebo78/stanchezza_001.jpg

c&c r welcome ;)



edit:
here is the translation
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Sleep! I have the eyelids so heavy, that I have the impression not to be able to open them. How i am able in the end, I do not know it, but it is just for noticing than the body still seems more tired. Where am I? My room! Sure!
And yet, he seems to me... Different... The clear walls, the decorations, the furniture. All so extraneous, but, I am sure that it is my room! Only now I notice to be dressed in part. Trousers of an overalls and a T-shirt. It is afternoon, a sunny afternoon. On the contrary, it is very hot...
I have made the Siesta. Why? However I must get up! Not something has to be done today. It is just that I want to win this sleep and wrong sensation that grip me.
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||STEBO||
September 19th, 2004, 08:56 AM
page two:

http://digilander.libero.it/stebo78/stanchezza_002.jpg
Kresh
September 19th, 2004, 01:46 PM
Man i really like these, you got a nice style.

I like in the first one how the room looks slighty warped, like is some fucked up Tim Burton movie.

Second one I really love the colors you used and the brownish textures u used on those walls.

I do like the characters you made but I thinnk you could use just a little more refinement on them to make them stand out a little more, and a little more intresting to look at.

Great stuff man or should I say great art? I think with your style and some great composition you should sell your stuff.
||STEBO||
September 19th, 2004, 02:10 PM
so many compliments...
really happy sombody likes my stuff...
this is a project "just to learn how to work with this style"...
the story is relly nice and i'm so happy i found somebody with my same feeling...

hope one day i would sell something... for the moment i thank u for your words ;)

come back sometimes to watch out the other pages :D
||STEBO||
September 25th, 2004, 10:21 AM
page three

http://digilander.libero.it/stebo78/stanchezza_003.jpg
||STEBO||
September 30th, 2004, 12:50 PM
page 4:

http://digilander.libero.it/stebo78/stanchezza_004.jpg
||STEBO||
October 5th, 2004, 09:47 AM
Page 5:

http://digilander.libero.it/stebo78/stanchezza_005.jpg
||STEBO||
October 6th, 2004, 01:18 PM
Page 6:

http://digilander.libero.it/stebo78/stanchezza_006.jpg
nephilim
October 6th, 2004, 04:08 PM
the paintings are great, but the test doesnt fit with the paintings at all. The semi-clean type font doesnt fit with your loose, messy, textureds paintings. i would suggest rethinking your type placement, and font choice. i would go for something a little more distorted. perhaps you could draw the text. that usually is the best way to make organic text that looks nice. hope i helped

mike
||STEBO||
October 6th, 2004, 04:17 PM
tnx a lot for the feedback [the second at all...] ... i know the font type and placement are "wrong" but for the moment i use them...maybe once finished i'll try to find something better even if all my searches did not return me something good...
||STEBO||
October 11th, 2004, 07:30 AM
Page 7 [one to go :D]:

http://digilander.libero.it/stebo78/stanchezza_007.jpg
||STEBO||
October 11th, 2004, 10:56 AM
Page 8 - last one ;) :

http://digilander.libero.it/stebo78/stanchezza_008.jpg