First post: Starside girl *edited*

[Gezstar]

Hi. Great forum - there's a lot of amazing art here!

Anyways, this is the first pic I've done entirely digitally. It's meant to be the sci-fi equivalent of a girl relaxing by the sea... hope you like :)

*Edit* I took your (and other) helpful suggestions into account, and: darkened the eagle; added a glow to the electricity on her hand; made the holo-screen easier to understand (hopefully :) )

http://img.ranchoweb.com/images/gezstar/starsidenew.jpg

[MindCandyMan]

That is a really tough pose but I think you accomplished it very well. Looks well balanced to me. Also I think the hand holding the gun as well as the metallic hand was done very well. I love the landing mech falcon/eagle...that's really cool. The texture on the pants is really well done. All in all a really good pic...excellent. One crit perhaps would be the length of her nose...her nose seems a bit too long...that maybe just be me but you did an awesome job with this piece. Great work.

[ODIN SIX]

Great peice!!!!!!

I love the Green Feeling it has...
The only that bothers me is the small picture on the right
seems out of place or does not fit

Great work ,,, lets see some more

[grey]

nice treatment of the figure, especially the lower body/waist/legs

i think i get the picture/screen, i'm guessing it's a projected image like a floating LCD screen, but i don't get what's happening in it (two guys spacewalking, but are they outside her ship, just working, in trouble, sneaking in?)

good colors also; my least favorite element though is the falcon, seems stiff

[Fozzybar]

:eek: Very good composition and rendering! You're right there is a lot of amazing art here...looks as if it'll be more amazing art :D

[Loga4]

Welcome!
That`s very good
piece,Gezstar,keep `em coming,
please.

[Lono]

very neat!

very aqua.

i like it.

-Lono

[JoshuaTheJames]

love it...inspiring!

-Joshua

[davi]

very cool, for some reason the head seems too big for the body, I thought the thighs were too short at first but i noticed the head was effecting the piece a bit, still amazing

[ljefe]

I don't know about the falcon being too stiff, but it's coming in to land aparently on nothing. maybe give it a perch (sp) or something. Also, the head is definitely too big. I first looked at the piece and was like "sweet" but then, when i read davi's comment, i went back, and, sure enough, he was right. reduce the head size, fix the falcon landing problem, clear up the issue/confusion with the floating picture, and you're set with a great piece. good work, and thanks. Oh, and sweet tatoos

[John P.]

Very nicely done! :)

I'm not sure if i think her head is too big - I'm not sure if you went for realism there or a more 'cartoony'(for the lack of better word) style. If you went for realism, the eyes are too big and the nose probably too long. But since the rest of the drawing is the quality that it is, I doubt you'd not see that yourself, so I personally think this is the style you went for.
But of course; sometimes we get blind when we've been working on a drawing for too long, so maybe....

About the landing falcon: I think you meant it to land on one of those things that stand out of the balcony, and use that as a perch.
The problem there I think is that the falcon is more detailed and 'sharper' than the perch thingy standing out from the balcony, making the falcon appear closer to us than the perch thingy. So it more looks like it'll land on her or something.

As for the floating image, I gathered that that was probably a futuristic, holographic image/television screen.
But it's a bit distractig in this piece, so I agree with the others there. It's also too sharp in comparison to the rest of the piece I think.

But......

Right now, I don't think I could do what you've done here(because you have a very good technique), so obviously i think you've done a good job overall. :)

Welcome here, btw!

[Gezstar]

thanks for the warm welcome! i'm happy you liked the pic.

MindCandyMan, cheers for the compliments - i appreciate it. about the nose, i kind of see your point but... i guess i like long noses :)

ODIN SIX, thanks. I'm glad you liked the colours. i changed the hologram cos you and a few others commented on it. does it look better now? I'll post more when i've finished a short comic sample i'm doing, in a similar, if looser, style.

grey: good comments. i agree that the falcon looked unnatural (see edit above). it should look more like it's landing on that post now. don't be too concerned about what's going on in the screen - it's actually a car flipping and throwing its passengers off (an image from a comic i did). just supposed to be a tv show.

Fozzybar - that's really kind of you! cheers!!:D

Loga4, you too, thanks. as soon as my next comic's done you can bet i'll post it here.

Lono - you're right, it's an aquatic pallette. glad you liked it :)

JOSHUATHEJAMES, wow that's a great compliment! thanks

davi: cheers. i see what you're saying with the head, but to be honest with you, it doesn't bother me that much. i think the big/anime-ish eyes and headscarf make it seem bigger too. thanks for the crit.

ljefe: it's cool you noticed the tattoos... about the head, read above. as for the bird and floating picture, hopefully my edit will have dealt with them. thanks for the input.

John P: damn what a great comment! i think you hit the nail on the head every time - nice one. hopefully i've sorted out the depth issues on the eagle; i also reduced the sharpness of the screen and gave it a light border. and thanks for the welcome - i'll be sticking around for sure.

[AfroLaxMan]

i didn't see it before the comments were made the fixes were put in, so you may think this is moot, but over all, this is a great piece. i love the mood and the color.
I have to say the hologram forces a lot of attention to itself, and the more i look at the piece, the more my eyes are drawn towards it. I go from the right hand to the hologram, and i have to force my eyes away to look at the rest of the piece. I think mainly because of the intensity and hue of the color. Other than that, kick butt.

great work, do you have more?

[Gezstar]

Thanks AfroLaxMan. I know what you mean with the hologram: that thing's been nothing but grief since i thought of it! however, i think the composition doesn't really work without it, cos to an extent it keeps the eye on the page. i want the focus to be the girl's face, which i tried to do by using a darker line and more contrast there... also i just realised it was the wrong size for the print i wanted to make, so i cropped some of the screen as well as the back of the chair, which helped the composition out.

i do have more pics, but this is the first i've done in this style. i was doing a pencilled/inked/coloured comics style before, but i have to say i prefer this. it's quicker too! i'll have more up soon i hope.

[Loga4]

Thanks,Gezstar.
Can`t wait to see more of your
stuff.