Blade

[SageGod]

I am in a constant struggle to break into comics.
Here's a Blade cut I just finished.
Crits and comments.. I need help.


http://www.johnscavella.com/Interface/Graphics/Blade.gif


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[lactose]

The perspective seems a little funny and the cityscape seems somewhat flat texture-wise. Also, from this angle, his katana looks a wee bit like a lightsaber.

Hope that helps. =)

[JeffZNY]

first thing that jumped out at me is that the torso is way too big for the legs. i guess he's leaning toward us, so the legs are further away, but still, it doesn't seem in proportion.

[Eew]

im realy sorry but : ohh he is a gayblade ! i loved his pants i dont think even britney spears wears them so tight ! lollollo i know im hopelles :nohope:

now for the real crits : there is something realy strange going on at his torso +legs area if he is leaing forward then his torso should be smaller and as we watch at him standing above the horizon he needs some work in that area .. i suggest to do couple quick sketches to get the feeling of the pose and viewpoint .... and as im color noob i shut up about it ....

[dr01d]

as for as the colour go's it'd be nice if the solid black of his suit wasn't so obvious,or better if the buildings behind him were in solid black silhouette. then the highlights would be the only defining form and you might reduce the proportion problem with his legs.

[Eew]

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[madphill]

outside of the small problems people have mentioned i actually think you've done pretty good here. I like it. The glow around him is a little distracting, but don't be too awful hard on yourself here.

[SageGod]

I could not have asked for better feed back.
Thanks.

From the time I drew this piece, I've been working on my prespective.

[defcombeta]

i agree the perspective is off . also the piece could use some detail work on the foreground buildings everything looks so pristine, some chips and cracks or even dirt would help. take care setting your horizion and distance points and the images usually come together.

john mac

[tgfx]

:bashful: You should join us. Your art is very good. Keep it up man.

[Silvertone]

DRAW THE BLADE AWAY FROM THE CROTCH!!

It looks like he's scratching himself with that double bladed thing.Seriously,little things like that can kill the mood of a piece unintentionally.I would angle his right arm over more towards the
mid thigh or at least point that tip down away from his sweetspot!
The lines on the building that blade is on are going straight up&down
but they should be going to the same 3rd vanishing point as the buildings
behind him.Like you said though, you're working on it.I think it has the makings of a cool cover or splash page.

[RCabrales]

i agree that you should stay away from obvious photoshop effects like the lens flare, glow and texturing... it gives the image a bit of an amaturish feel... or at least practice a little more with those effects until you can reproduce them without the use of photoshop tools....

the perspective problem is a tough one, but with practice you'll be able to develop an intuition for vanishing points. just practice with basic geometric shapes like cylinders, blocks etc....there's tons of good books out there that can walk you through it.

finally, i think the background is too flat....you don't necessarily have to put a ton of detail into it, but it looks bland compared to the dynamic flare of the character in the foreground....

8) good work though....very clean and well presented

don't forget to post your progress

-Raúl