the girl with the camera

[JProvost]

http://inertia.autophobic.net/illustration/images/170.jpg

Criticism and comments encouraged. It's been a while since I've done a finished digital painting.

Feel free to stop by my Daily Sketchbook as well.

[Hexal]

Very nice, i like it.

Some of the perscetive it off i think though, like the green door on the bron garage. Aslo the light blue one looks weird to me.

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[JProvost]

I was trying to get the green door on the brown garage to look ajar and broken, but I had a feeling that wouldn't come across right...

Thanks for the input.

[chozometroid]

Very nice. The white area at the end of the alley looks strange though. Hard to tell what it is. Dust?

To make the door look broken, maybe you should make the lines for the paneling perfectly level(for the perspective) for the top 1/2 of the door, then make a shift in the angle of the lines from that point down- increasing the angle more and more until you get to the bottom where it will be very noticeable. Also, add shading in the area where it is "crunched up" to enhance the effect.

[DragonGX]

Her foot should have a shadow running over her toe, and she looks like she is very big/tall... she should be smaller..

[LiL QoH]

its rather flat and smeary in areas that no need to be smeary or blurred..seems like the buildings in the way back are more sharper than the ones in front

[Elok]

i think its all pretty good although the girl doesn't look much like she is holding the camera

[davi]

i agree with what lilqoh says, there's a lack of depth of feild, the only thing that is desaturated are the shadows of the buildings, the girls back should have some saturation of some sort, the back of her jeans look even more saturated than the front of them, it's a very nice piece though, i enjoy the colors... makes me want to watch one of the animatrix shorts

[dogfood]

This is nice. It has a good feeling to it, but the fact that the blue/blue garage sits back a little makes the girl look a bit large.
Also, though most of the elements draw the eye right through the piece, that tree's high saturation keeps jerking my eye back to the left.

[se7en_]

It could use more contrast between the foreground and background - it will help with the depth of field and make it more interesting. Then again, what do I know?

[SaIiLdVaEnR]

Why is her foot not in the shadow?

Aidan

[bOne]

the first thing that bother me is the composition of your pic, it's titled the girl with the camera, and in a first look we see a street, than a girl in a corner...

The second thing is that you colors are too separated and not part of a same universe, your trees are too green... why there is pink on the building on the horizon ?

The last thing is that you worked more on the girl detail than the rest of the picture so we have a feeling that the rest isn't finished.

If I have one advice it's to draw from live reference to learn more about perspective, and look at famous painters work, to see how they use colors to create moods.

[JProvost]

Thanks for the comments, everyone.

chozometroid: Great suggestions. Very useful. I should have put a little more thought into it.

LiL QoH: Using sharpness as a depth and compositional cue... I'll try to keep it in mind in the future.

davi: I find saturation a lot harder to control than value. I've seen in your work tight use of it can really punctuate elements. I'll have to keep an eye out for it.

dogfood: Noted. Will try to be more fussy with saturation in the future.

se7en: Thanks. Just a critique of my own - be a little more confident.

bOne: I was trying to place primary emphasis on the girl by creating core tonal contrast between shade/cast shadow and sunlight. Maybe it didn't work so well.
Appreciating the comments on colours - it's something I obviously stuggle with. I think painting from life a bit more will help just as much as drawing. Thanks for the help.