deformed head - FIRST TIME POSTING

[JeffZNY]

hey all, I'm new to this site, having just discovered it yesterday. conveniently enough, today I decided to get acquainted with Painter, which I also newly discovered (sorry, I don't know where I've been!). So since this is my first time posting, and my first attempt with Painter, I would welcome whatever C&C people have to offer.
http://members.aol.com/jeffzny/deformed.jpg

[Scarn]

wow... 185 views and no posts. What a crappy day to discover the boards. Well. I see if I can change that ;)
The lighting on the face looks scewed - as in:: theirs too much shadow- not enough light. Even though the lower part of the face is further away from the lightsource - you may want to carry some more of the light down to accent the shadow - and make the face come off the page. But all in all. pretty good.

[JeffZNY]

thanks! that post was much appreciated! You're right, 185 views and no posts, I was beginning to get depressed;-) I guess it just means for my next post I'll have to try to come up with something that might generate some more interest. Also, I see your point about the lighting. Some highlights on the lower portion of the face might make it pop more.

[JeffZNY]

Well, I only got one feedback, but I decided to mess around with the painting some more anyway. I tried to incorporate some of the critique, and I think the images pops out more now. I don't know if I completely fixed the screwy lighting though...I tend to concentrate more on what looks interesting than realistic lighting effects. It's probably a flaw. Anyway, any comments?
http://members.aol.com/jeffzny/deformed2.jpg

[Scubasteve]

thats one deformed head! :nod:

[Denart]

nice use of colors to add more "deformity"

i like the neck that he's standing on, I don't like how the top of the head is cut off. Either cut more off or show more

[JeffZNY]

Yeah, I don't know what happened to the head there. The top was actually just hiding outside of the composition. I don't know at what stage that happened, but thanks for pointing it out. Fixed:
http://members.aol.com/jeffzny/deformed3.jpg

[Killer Napkins]

finally another dude that draws deformed heads! haha thats cool.. looks cool. looks liek something id draw haha

[seewhy]

i think the composition would work better if you left some more room at the top of the head, centering it might help contrast the top of the head against the background and make more sense of the light falling on it. nice colours.

[JeffZNY]

seewhy--i think you're probably right. The top of the head could definitely use some more contrast against the background. I don't think I'll do much more tinkering with the lighting on the face though, cause I like how the colors are working a lot right now. Also, while I'm definitely going to take your advice on the composition, I probably won't post it because I've posted 3 versions of this guy already. Don't worry though, the C&C was much appreciated everyone!
-Jeff

[jetpack42]

185 views and no posts, I was beginning to get depressed;-)

this happens to almost everyone when they first start. It happened to me, and I bet it happened to 85% of the other members.

anyhow..i suck at painting, but i'll point some things out. general blurriness detracts from the image. a prime example is the mouth. its blurry, but there isn't a point to it being blurry it seems. you need to go in with some strokes and commit to painting whatever area you're painting (like you did on the nose). the bright blue at the bottom of the chin is strange...its not darker like shadow, is his chin glowing? anyway, i hope those were some things to think about. check the life drawing/tutorial forum for some basic painting tutorials and basic color tutorials. Even if you have a pretty good idea, they are good reads. good luck with the next one.

[Jason Manley]

the blurryness stems from the brush you are using i will assume. try mixing in a range of brush edge qualities...soft to sharp...but hit the interesting parts extra sharp...give us a place for the eye to rest...you want people to look at the image...but when they look you want to give them a spot to focus on and say HOLY SHIT that is awesome!


is your light source supposed to be all over the place? Is the light source coming from so many directions on purpose?


you have some nice color variation going on. keep up with that. your color is better than many already...probably your biggest strength right now. work on your detailing skills...ie use smaller brushes in the areas of importance.

j

[jetpack42]

jeff, also, check this thread out. You might like it.

http://www.conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?t=25953

[JeffZNY]

k, folks, i made some more changes:
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v470/JeffZNY/deformed4.jpg

[Joey-b]

this just keeps gettin better.! i just love the colors u used.. no further crits spotted.. good job