Succubus drawing

[Nbloom23]

Hey guys, this is my first art post here...let me know what you think.

http://www.deviantart.com/view/6362846/ http://images3.deviantart.com/i/2004/097/7/2/Succubi.jpg

[McNallyism]

ahem...check out Oblio's rule....

[Nbloom23]

oh.....don't have my own site yet...guess I'll have to wait:(

[Nbloom23]

ok...is this betta?

[JoshuaTheJames]

I like the face on the middle chick.

btw Sean! Stop being a meany!

-Joshua




:D

[JoShuA]

inspired by COOP!

[Nbloom23]

Thanks Joshthejames. I rarely get many replies to my stuff elsewhere. I appreciate any comments i get.

Joshua...what is COOP?

[JoShuA]

chris cooper. www.coopstuff.com
he does tons of stuff like this.

[GK Smith]

This is a really nice drawing. I got only one problem with it though, the middle girls face, it looks like its winding around too much and is a bit too long. Thats the only thing i think that looks awkward. Other than that, everything else is great.

Keep up the good work,
Greg Smith

[brads3d]

i feel like i've seen this image like 5011 times. if you had to make a fresh concept of something succubus-like, what would you change? i think you have good base rendering skill, so try something freshist!

[Jane Radstrom]

Hey Bloom. Post the stuff from the sketchbook you showed me at the Globe last night - that stuff was alot more interesting! Especially the character work you've done for those stories. It may be personal taste, but I think those would go over better here. More concept-oriented and a bit less comic book. Those characters just had more to them.

For crits on this.. I agree that the main girl's face is a bit whack. I think with her head at that angle you could see a litte of the underside of her chin, and probably reduce the size of it and her face a bit, too. I really like the kneeling one. Her face and pose seem the least contrived and it makes her alot sexier than the other two. One last comment, I hope you don't mind as this is less technical and more preference. I think you could improve the dynamics between the three characters and it would help the whole image. Possibly the main gal looking at the one on her leg, or just reposition her head so she looks more dominant by looking straight at the viewer or at least more intesely at something off-page. The one on the leg could be looking up submissively/sexually. I think that would help the story telling within this image, more than just "we're all sexy bitches" the faces and poses (instead of just the chains) could tell you "we're this sexy bitch's slaves, and she likes it" .

Drop me an email. Velondra@velondra.com I have extra webspace if you'd like to host some stuff on it before you get your own site up and running. I hope the crits were helpful and you don't mind. ;) It was good meeting you the other night, we should chat more sometime. -Jane (That white girl from The Globe.)

[Clandestine_IX]

I guess I am just a hop on the bandwagon type of guy, but I cant get over that middle chicks face. The rest of the drawing is really good, (and I am not just saying that to cushion the blow of what I am about to say, because it really is) The first thing you see is her face and it has some very odd anatomy. The horns are somewhat uneven and her chin is enormous. Also some of the other things like her eyes do not seem to line up. I wouldn't say anything but, the girl on the bottom right is done so well that it makes her look even more out of place. Obviously you have skills, try flipping the drawing over and looking at it backwards, that may help you see some mistakes that you missed. I hope this is helpful.

[Nbloom23]

Thanks a bunch everyone:)

I'm just happy to get some feedback. I realize this pic has problems. The face comment is taken into accord and appreciated. Thanks again....i'll show better stuff; promise.

Jane, what's up? Thanks for the crits...they were on point. I'll talk to you soon.

[perlaki]

This image gives me the horn! hehe.
My only comment on improvement (apart from middle ones face as mentioned) is the left leg on the girl on the right just looks a bit chunky by the thigh/arse. As a sexual focus point (spread legs), it' needs to look right. Other than that, great use of space. Look forward to some more of your work.