Various Portraits

[wassermelone]

Just dropping off some work that I have been doing for some classes.

These first two went into a book that we were to create.
Rough in most places but they served their purpose well.
Reference used only for minor details. Don't look anything like the reference =P
http://www.rsad.edu/~awhitmor/images/1.jpg
http://www.rsad.edu/~awhitmor/images/2.jpg

Self Portrait
Changing the lighting was tough =P
http://www.rsad.edu/~awhitmor/images/selfportrait.jpg

-toasty

[Bammer]

Okay...
The first one has a good expression I do like it. But the far eye seems to be drifting off to the right (his left) and it immidatly strikes me as bad looking. Also, his silhouette is not sharply defined but edges on his features are. This strikes me as impossible and bad looking.

The second one looks good concidering it's roughness. It is extremely rough however, and I hope you are aware that its roughness gives the impression of a quick and unfinished speed painting, not a finished piece that's roughness is stylized. You're welcome to disagree, but that's the honest impression that I get.

The third one is okay and the style can work, but the background is busy and distracting. And on a semi-personal note, you've drawn better far better portrates of yourself Toasty. Your mouth, which you've always been so good at drawing, looks weird man.

What grade did you get on these anyway?

[wassermelone]

Neither are graded yet.
The first two images are away from the whole (as in the book).
The second one I turn in tomorrow.

If the mouth does look wierd to anyone else... could someone give a paintover?
I was drawing myself in a normal lighting situations and was having a little difficulty changing it so drastically

Thanks Greg.
Minor critique on your critique...
You might want to avoid things like "bad looking" when you get to in class critiques. It makes you sound silly =D

-toasty =)

[wood]

hey, I think I helped with the mouth. I think it might be nice if you put the sillouette of the eyelashes or something in "your" left eye socket because the space the eye should occupy looks a little artificial.

http://www.norwoodcole.com/artworkfornewsite/paintover.jpg

I extended the highlight on the tip of the nose out allitle to show roundness and reduced the highlight on the back of the nostril because I think the lower face would block some of the highlight( i think this attaches it better).

I also extended "your" left side of the upper lip so that it would curve around your upper teeth and brightened up the front of the bottom of the chin because I thought it looked right.

your stuff is cool, keep posting and showing us the goodness.

latez.
I usually don't do paintovers but you asked for it so I was like, "why not?"

hope it was helpfull, the changes were small but I think some along those lines would help.

good stuff, I'm a student also and I actually have a scratchboard stippling assignment due tommorow that I am procrastinating on :(

anyways

[rodrigo!]

i like the lighting in them, cool stuff!