Angel Sentry of the FUTUuUuURE!!!

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new pic! i dont think i'm quite done with this one yet. could use some c&c! ;)

pen drawing//colored in photoshop
http://mercury.walagata.com/w/pitufoo/angelsentry.jpg

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110 views and not a single reply? :(

[dusty imp]

Seek and ye shall find...

Um... yeah.
Ok, the concept is pretty interesting.
What i would do is;
a) use more colors
b) get rid of black outlines
c) add shadows in proper places
d) add details to the mechanical parts
e) make em more functional looking, esp. those feet.
f) if you expect people to treat your topic seriously, then come up with a less childish title

Keep pushing it, you've got a good start.

[jadedchron]

Ditto. Although I wouldn't say black outlines are bad - depends on the drawing/artist - but in this case they look bad.

[Tully]

Most of it is pretty well drawn, but I would completely redo the wings. That's just not what wings look like. Try going to some sites with pictures of birds (creative.gettyimages.com is a good place to start), and get some reference images.

As for the lines... try varying the width them. Thicker lines in places you want to draw attention to and thinner ones for detail. You'd be surprised with what a huge difference this can make.

The colours in her skin are sorta muddy. Looks like you shaded with black? That's a bad idea. Maybe go less ochery and more pinkish. Skin tones usually aren't that olive.

Maybe tone the background too. Just a bit darker. White backgrounds can be kinda overwhelming on coloured lineart like this.

[Aerythes]

I think the general concept is quite interesting, especially that helm of hers; not a design that's generally associated with angels, but it works in this case. :)

One thing I need to point out is the way you drew the weapon she carries. You need to make it straighter. It looks crooked and somewhat flimsy right now, which isn't such a good thing for a weapon.

Oh, another thing is the cloth on her skirt. The folds need to be a bit more realistic.

[Abbobaf]

I don't really mind the outline, although I would make it much less pronounced...I like the "micron" pens...especially the 0.2mm one...

The wing do need work, and perhaps a slightly more muscular back...

I personaly doen't think that the weapon fits the charactor...I should be far more stylized for an angel. I think it's too simple...should be more fancy.

Also I would reserve the three hinged legs for demons and/or monsters and leave angels more human-ish...The boots would appear to be grafted to the ankles(I don't see where a foot could go)...

[Hazart]

Originally posted by flavorite
110 views and not a single reply? :(

Dont worry... I have 350 in finished ones...

I like her shoes and helmet.

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woot! lots of replies!

thanks for being critical about it, it helps alot.... i did the lines with a .5 (i think) micron pen, probably too thick to vary it properly? the next smallest micron i have is a .05 which is ridiculously flimsy , so i dont use it much... (i just bought the smallest one and a medium one to get a feel for what the sizes are like) i should probably get a .2 or get bigger paper. :rolleyes:

the skin tone is supposed to be pretty dark, but i see what you mean about the shading being muddy.

the weapon, though there might be a cooler design i could have made, isn't supposed to be too complicated looking, because the concept was sorta meant to be a mass produced basic scout type o guy... and her feet go into the part that attaches to the base of the shoes (if that makes any sense... hard to explain) and they're designed for easy landing and jumping after flying around... and... stuff like that.... :)

i probably wont be redoing any of the lineart though because i can never work on one thing for too long and this was just for fun, (so the most i'll probably do is fix the coloring and maybe a couple minor things like the perspective issue on the base of the weapon) but the tips help a lot for the next stuff i do.