Trooper (UPDATED!)

[Wart]

This is a concept for a game I'm working on. Not a big huge game being made by a big huge company, but a little freeware dealy that I'm making at my school with two other guys. I'm in charge of basicaly anything to do with design (concepts, storyline, etc.), as I'm the only one geeky enough to care about story and whatnot, as well as 3d modeling. So i have a lot to do. Anyway, this guy is a basic trooper for one of the two sides:
http://img4.photobucket.com/albums/v29/wartman/Samson-TrooperWIPWeb.jpg
(Old one)

http://img4.photobucket.com/albums/v29/wartman/samsontrooperFINALCONCEPTWE.jpg
This is the new drawing I did after I decided to srap the old one. Before I dive into coloring it, anyone see any big problems? Anything, any advice or comments, is greatly appreciated. I'm also interested in what you think of the concept- does he look cool? And any color scheme advice would rock, I have a hell of a time with it as I am mostly colorblind. Anyway...

[nevershotdown]

:D
he looks pretty good to me. i'm not a crazy talented drawing person so you don't have to worry. if you draw any more concepts or model anything i would like to see them. Good luck on your game.

[Wart]

Hey, thanks for the comment. I'll keep posting once I get stuff done.

[bafl1]

his arms a little too short ... his left arm (on the right side of the paper) needs to fall behind him some ..and bend he looks like he has his arms shoved infront of him all uncumfortable like ...
his legs seem to big but that might be because the armor ... and his arms making them look big comparitively ..
you have a strong one way light ..that seems to be coming from the left of the paper .. but then you have the strongest highlights on the foot on the right of the paper ... and the shoulder on the right of the paper ...and on the right hip guard ... (his left side of his body) ...
if the light is coming from the left side of the paper these highlights need to be on the opisite side ...

[Wart]

Hmm.. yeah, something was bothering me about the arm, now I can see what it was. Thanks for the comments on the lighting- I'm having a hell of a time learning this painting stuff. Anyway, i think i'm scrapping this guy and starting over: you can still post comments if you like, anything to help me along is appreciated. Thanks for the reply.

[Wart]

Bump to get crits on new sketch.

[teh fonx]

the fold on the shirt is off, the guy looks slanted, fuxor around in photo shop to have the picture straight, when you do that im sure you will notice that his left leg is too long, they should have about the same "base".

Also his hand could use alot of work, from my personall experience the only way to help with that is to get a bigger pice of paper, or draw to the limits of the one you currently using, only than you can cram in the necessary detail to make the hands look right (same with face for most part).

Next his arms are too long, they should end at about the crotch.

All in all, just click on my sig and you should get instant help. Hope these crits dont discourage you, thats not the intent, the only way to get better is to practice practice practice. Good luck, and keep us updated on your progress.

[Wart]

Don't worry about discoraging me- thats exactly what I was looking for. He is actually supposed to be leaning a bit to the right (our right) to offset the weight of the gun, but, yeah, didn't pull that off too well. Thanks for those comments though- they're extreamly helpful.

(And that is a sweet link in your sig. You, sir, rock)