Cartoon WIP.. Unpainted

[t i m]

Hey Guys,

This is the lineart for my comic strip over at gotfrag.com, I was wondering if any of you would be willing to slap some paint on it. Seeing as how I have 0 time as of late I would GREATLY appreciate it. Oh, and of course you would be credited as painting the piece on the finished cartoon..Also C&C are welcome on the lineart.

Thanks for your time guys!:chug:

P.S. Sorry about the links..:(

~Tim~

http://www.amf-clan.com/album_pic.php?pic_id=121

http://www.amf-clan.com/album_pic.php?pic_id=122

http://www.amf-clan.com/album_pic.php?pic_id=123

http://www.amf-clan.com/album_pic.php?pic_id=124

[DragonGX]

It's hard to critique cartoons, but try to smooth out your lines. Study some photos of real body parts in the same poses as your cartoons and incorporate that into your drawings..

[shortmikeshort]

I'm a cartoonist too.

I kinda like it. Some things I'm sure you're aware of: opening each link kinda takes the punch out of reading it. I would look to tighten up the pacing a bit. There is a huge time jump from seeing th esnake to having the snake coiled around him. I suggest seeing the snake strike (more punch) and then coiled. Play with camera angles too, everything is from the same POV.

What Dragon said- take a look at life poses and let it inform your work. I do like the facial expressions. Classic and simple.

I suggest that you don't color it, and maybe throw in some backgrounds or heavy blacks to Pop the image a bit more.