"seduction" ...

[sandrue]

i'm thinking of doing some "succubus-type-chick-seducing-some-poor-warrior-guy" (:bash: ) kinda work. here's the quick sketch i just made to see the anatomy and postures...

http://img17.photobucket.com/albums/v50/sandrue/seduction.jpg

before i go into details, inking and colouring; i need some feedback on the above mentioned criteria. anyway, don't hesitate to give ideas about other things, like what kinda stuff they should wear (:D ), etc.

thanks a lot...
:chug:

[SEVANS]

The male charactors pose looks wrong and his arms are out of proportion. His upper arm is about 2 heads long and his forearm appears about 1 head long. These on average or about 1.5 - 1.25 heads long.

The female succubus's back leg sholudn't be on exactly the same 'ground line' as her front leg. It doesn't appear to be receding correctly.

Decent pose, just rework it.

[SeraphSword]

I agree with the arn crit, and the legs seem to be having some trouble, starting at the hips. Given the way the hips are turned, her back leg shouldn't be facing forward. Looks like this could develop into a nice picture. One thing that might look good would be for her left wing to be wrapped around him, kinda pulling him to her. Good luck.

[sandrue]

i've made some changes about the posture and proportions...

also started to "think" about the details; anyway i'm NOT liking the way this piece is going to! think i'm going to redraw after being sure about the silhouette (is it spelled correctly? :confused: )

http://img17.photobucket.com/albums/v50/sandrue/seduction02.jpg

[Sularia]

Here's just a suggestion, but I think you should go with the idea of her being a winged creature. She doesn't necessarily have to be touching the ground, but could be hoovering , maybe over his shoulder, leaning down over him, whispering in his ear?

I would seriously think about changing the pose to place emphesis on her seductiveness. Right now if you took away the wings she could be any other woman, try to bring out the 'demon' in her.

Sularia :evilbat:

[fukifino]

Two areas that are really bothering me right now are her pelvis and her shoulder/chest.

With her pelvis, you definately need to take a look at how the pubic area is distorted by a figure in that position. You've definately got that loin cloth on her swung way too far over...find the centerline of her body and follow it down from the pit of her nick to her crotch (sorry, I can't think of a more polite term)...there's definately some flattening going on down there.

With the arm she's using to reach for his hand, the angle you have it at would cause compression of her breast..she's bringing her arm accross her body, which would push her breast in. Right now her arm looks a bit like it's floating.

Definately take a look at some photos (or better yet, try to get a friend to model for you) for some references. You've got a good idea, now don't be afraid to scrap your initial sketches and keep trying until you really nail it. And don't start on those details until you really have that anatomy nailed.

[sandrue]

well, THANKS A LOT guys, really appreciated constructive criticism... i know i have some big problems about anathomy; think i'm going to draw MANY MORE sketches, more roughly maybe, very quick, thumbnail type. just MORE MORE MORE...

i'll think about the hovering idea, seems to have lots of potential

more is coming, just wait...

thanks a lot!