Shaman Ressurection

[HellTaxi]

b/w pen. C&C very welcome, thanks.http://www.angelfire.com/comics/helltaxi/shaman.txt

[HellTaxi]

christ, 55 veiws and not one reply? come on people, i really could use the feedback. thank you

[MindCandyMan]

hey taxi,
Sorry you haven't gotten any responses...I know how that is...no one responds to mine either hehe. I am new to art but I will try to offer some helpful suggestions. The idea is really cool..and I like her "breath" coming out...that's really cool. Something about the shaman's pectoral muscles seems wrong. I think they may need to be a bit bigger. Also the shaman's left arm...the one holding the staff is at a weird angle. I think you need to change the angle at which his hand is grasping the staff...doesn't seem to be anatomically possible. Also the drapes on the woman around her chest don't seem to really be "hanging" there. The one side is folded over like it's ready to fall but the fabric is flat on her breasts right next to that. I don't know if that made sense... I think the perspective on the skull in the top right is kind of off. The eye socket on the left is showing (or is forward) a little too much I think. The skull on the upper left looks really awesome...can't wait to see that inked. Awesome. The Shaman is drawn very well...the staff design is really cool with the jawless skull and the bead thingees hanging off. It's really creepy and really good...I can't wait to see it finished. Keep up the work. Looks awesome.

[keenerbean]

Nicely rendered and the shaman's mask/face is cool as well. With the mouth, is the highlight below the opening his teeth or bottom lip? Cuz if it's the lip you should see teeth at that angle. Another thing, when people read body language the second thing they look at after face is hands. I think the both the hands need to arranged to have stronger silouettes so the pose can read better.
Hope that helps.

[keenerbean]

Never mind about the teeth lip thing. Had a closer look figured it out but I think you should strengthen the defininition between neck and jaw. Tricky to do with your underlighting but it would help imho.

[Oblio]

her proportions are off - look at her feet - you don;t want her to walk on your toe...
the light on his fce is comming from above.. and on his body from below... (?)
her shading seems... unclear.
hope it helps. best of luck... show us more!!!

Oblio

[HellTaxi]

wow thanks a million everybody, that really helps. As for the light source, it was a sketch, so after i had did the face, i decided i wanted the "breath" to be the light source :) that particular lighting angle threw me off with the female as you can see. Thanks again everyone i really appreciate it.