new webcomic WIP

[Moccomouse]

My friend asked me to do these, the characters are his, and granted they're a bit simple, but I want to know what you guys think of the composition/color, etc.
text will come later.

http://img8.photobucket.com/albums/v28/Moccomouse/PoPToon1j.jpg


http://img8.photobucket.com/albums/v28/Moccomouse/pophabibj.jpg

[Moccomouse]

Update: Text added, maybe it'll make a little more sense now.

(mods: if the profanity is unacceptable, I'll gladly take it down)

http://img24.photobucket.com/albums/v71/psychosonparade/POP-001.jpg

[johanson]

In regards to your text: My eye goes over to "Fuck His Eyes!..." before it goes to "Bill, that can't be good for..."
We read left to right and then up to down. So after "are you okay?" my eye shoots across the page to word bubble directly to its right.
These two comics seem to be telling short gag stories. Have you considered putting them into a comic strip format versus a comic page? That would free up the upper left hand corner on the last panel, and fix the order of the word bubbles. Just a thought.

later,

-andrew